You've got to quench my curiousity! Update!

Very well written. Not usually a fan of OCs, but Will seems much more real than most others, so kudos for that. Liking the in-character Charlie, a lot of people can't pull that off, but you've managed to do so wonderfully. Overall very well done and interesting story.

Lol I love it when she hits him back! Good chapter and thx for the update :)

Yay, You updated! This was a really good chapter. I like that you are keeping charlie in character and Will's not a mary-sue. Keep up the good work!~Quinn

i love it!

i love it!

i love it!

What she felt was the only thing she would ever feel.

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful in its simplicity. God, I'm loving this fic.

Love your (Will) character and this story!. I can not wait for a new chapter!

i love it!

"Kudos for not turning Will into a Mary Sue and keeping Charlie firmly away from OCness."

I wholeheartedly agree. You avoided the easy route and having taken on the difficult task of introducing a new character as well as taking an already-presented character and keeping him true to his name.

Personally, I like that you don't have to rely on dialogue to create auras within the story, or develop your characters. I like your descriptions, they truly penetrate. I really look forward to more of this, and I don't say that about many stories. "His hands were shaking. His hands never shook." - these two, short sentences said what paragraphs and paragraphs sometimes could not. Just those little things are what make you a good writer.

This chapter is by far my favorite. You did such an incredible job of conveying the characters thoughts and emotions.

I love this. I can't really describe what I liked about this chapter.. but you created a feeling of.. frustration and timelessness? ..from the surroundings and the heat. Even though not a lot is happening action wise, it increases the story's intensity.

Kudos for not turning Will into a Mary Sue and keeping Charlie firmly away from OCness. And thanks for the quick-er update. :)

YAY you updated! I'm so happy; I've been waiting for more of this! :)

love the new chapter! and never mind, just because there is not much dialogue doesn't mean there is no action.
It maybe sounds a bit strange but I really liked your description of the heat... it made feel quite uneasy and frustrated myself... but in a good way...well you know what I mean :-)

I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Cheers,
Caranaraf