This is a very frightening story you've written. It's depth and how true it is for most people is truly amazing and as said frightening.

This is the stuff that should be written. stuff that embraces reality more than fantasy. compositions that have truth in it's words.

the ending paragraph and final statements were what really grabbed me, disgusting as it is and unthinkable as it is people do it.

Oh my goodness.
This was amazing. I NEVER thought of it that way. Great job. You are definitely going onto my author alert/story alert/etc. list.
::applauds::

I love it... it's so dark. Your writing style is wonderful, I see nothing that needs changing. Do continue with this story, I'll be waiting for an update ^_^

great story and far better then what i've put out but i do have one vice... well an input rather

i see this guy as a guy who enjoys his pokephilia :D