Ah..What is dair? Two or three? Whatever, update soon!

I am late in reviewing, as usual...

Hahahaha, hormonal ashe, love guru Basch and naive larsa (and Fran too) oh. I feel complete. haha. (Though that part with Vaan and Basch was awkward and insanely funny that i'm still not sure if i should be disturbed or not hahaha) Oh man, you're so good in writing you can even do something akin to bad subtitles too! I loved the larsa part and his struggle with the rozarian language!

The only comment I have is on the er... "entertainer". I can't say I've ever been to a bachelor party (haha, i bet my parents are eternally grateful to our creator for that! hahaha) but i kind of expected a grander entrance. Especially from balthier. (actually I was expecting a "cake" equivalent. hahaha) but given that it was in the Sandsea, and the guests were mostly military men, Balthier can't exactly pull off a moulin rouge kind of set, now would he? But still. Well, I suppose she has the rest of the show to make up for it, nonetheless. (though I think i know how "she" is. It won't be pretty now would it?)

It's been a while since I read FFXII fanfiction, and I'm glad I spotted this one. You have a hillarious beginning. Poor Fran, knowing where humes come from will be a very disturbing experience and I can't help but feel sorry for Balthier. Also, I can't wait to see Ashe's explanation of who the father is. Wonderful beginning and I can't wait to read the rest.

Joey

wow what a shocking twist. Keep up the great work and update soon.

I can't believe I haven't commented on this. Your humor makes it even better, Ashe's hormones kicking in, Basch's awkwardness in some situations, Balthier's sneaky tactics, Fran and Vaan's innocence, I could only lolroflrollercoastertoaster!

It's me, dayofcaligula, from LJ!

ZOMG! ML UPDATE!

*Puts of Re-Re-Re-Re-Playing FFXII* ML ML! You updated! (Now get on MSN! *SHOT* No you don’t have to if you don’t wanna)

And I shall try the whole Reviewing while reading thing!

Poor, Poor Basch. Nasty Iliana, you can’t do that to out bashful Captain!! D=

and any male whose pulse and heart were still beating)

Even (Kuro and Fai *SHOT* Oh come on you knew I’d mention them!) the gay ones? *Shot*

Oh Basch, Ashe is right there! She’ll treat you better that Ili! Well…when’s she’s not…on that particular cycle and heavily pregnant and hormonal. But…most of the time she will!

Basch knew that Iliana was not the woman he needed, or loved. Iliana was beautiful, but she was not Ashelia. Nor could she ever hope to be.)

SQUELL HERE!

Okay, I’m going to just sit and read...because it flows better…unless there really is a bit that makes me fangirl. (See you next sentence then *shot*)

“You are all right, aint’cha? Sir?”]

OMG PALA! *Clings to her*

Aww, Basch’s feeling guilty! He’s so noble *huggles him* Wait…Computes...Basch is going to tell Ashe that Ili hit on him? While she’s pregnant?! Oh! Not good! Not good!

Basch trusts Pala!! And so he should! *Hugs Pala*

“partae!” as Vaan had put it.)

Partae! Partae! Hee!! …*shuts up*

could speak just about every tongue in Ivalice)

Oh Balthier, you are such a geek!

uses of “slang” got extremely confusing.)

That gave me the image of Fran with a walking stick…*Cackles*

“You would dish wash us by throwing yourself at the Queen’s meat like that?”)
Oh god LOL!

as his father and most of the Senate didn’t feel it inappropriate to know]

Nitpick.
“as his father and most of the Senate felt it inappropriate to know” or “as his father and most of the Senate didn’t feel it appropriate to know”

*shot*

“I had him before she did! Basch is mine!”)

HOLY CRAP FANGIRL! Run Basch! Run for your life!

Oh Larsa…I want to pinch your cheeks so much right now.

“Keep her away from Ashe and Basch.”)

YES!

Vaan and Tomaj wore as Basch did, light comfortable black trousers and long boots, their shirts were unbuttoned so the thin materials billowed in the wind and showed off their bare chests.

showed off their bare chests.

showed off Vaan’s bare chest.

…

*Erupts into Squee-ing and promptly dies*

Ooh Vaan, how epic is one, with his glowing shirtless chest! *Shot for failed poet like lines*

who had been mouthing off with several threats, got his nose broken as Llyud’s wing smacked him in the face.)

BOO-YAH! But poor Basch, and his claustrophobia *Hugs him*

“What are stretch marks?”
“Fat people get them…Seeqs have them too.”
“Oh that’s not very tactful, Filo!”)

*Cackles* Lol! Oh Filo I want to hug you…I hope Ashe doesn’t do anything to her XD

Pala was looking at the floor, her hands wringing at her piny again, but there was a disapproving scowl upon her face)

Libra told her about the babbe!

“It’s about your baby, Highness.”)

Wait…WHAT’S WRONG WITH THE BABY? D= (Yes all caps in needed) …not the baby!

*Hits her* …unless its twins? Is it twins!?

AND OH THIS IS THE BASCH VAAN CONVERSATION! *Squee*

Now, If I had never been introduced to Fai (*shot for mentioning non FFXII character*) I’d never say what I’m about to;

“Thinking of Ashe…right?”)

No **, Vaan? *Shot* *Huggles him*

What does that feel like?”)

KYA! SAY THAT TO PENNY, VAAN! SHE’LL TACKLE YOU!

“Not the thrills of flying, or battling a fiend? Erm….” )

Oh Vaan *pinches cheek* I can imagine him when he realises he’s in love with Pen, all big grin! Hehee.

Llyud fainted…XDD Poor guy. But really, he should no better than to trust Balthier in theses situations.

Basch nearly fell off his chair, but when he realised that Vaan wasn’t actually propositioning him)

OH GOD LOL! LOL! That was funny! Drunken Vaan is win, so much win!

“Is what you’re feeling better than sex?”)

Typical drunken male, Balthier be a bad influence on him me thinks.

but it was obvious that she wanted me to marry her!)

A bit more than that!!
“FEEL, Vaan. What do you feel when you look at her, when you’re in her company? Do you think of her constantly when she’s not around, do you long to be with her when you are apart?”)

FDJGfkghflkdhgldfhg;ldskhbfd;”! *DIES*

but what if it doesn’t work out?! What if I balls things up, make her angry or hurt her? What if I’m no good at…..satisfying her?!! We could lose everything! Basch…I don’t think I could…”)

Aw Van! *Hugs* You won’t Vaan, yah won’t.

You like to partae!! *SHOT*

Balthier was still watching and listening in, the smirk on his face ever widening)

He’s planning something! D=

“To friends.”)

Aw!! I loved that bit.

Nitpick; I’d use more contractions for Vaan, as You’re instead of You are and the like. Haha *SHOT*

Holy hells! *Cackles* And no Basch, it isn’t. RUN BOY! RUN FOR YOUR LIFE!!

And the stripper is here…oh Basch…*Hugs* I feel for you, I really do. (and the crazy fan girl in me imagines Kurogane and Fai just not. Being. Interested. Kuro; What type of woman takes her clothes off in public?! Fai: Maybe it’s a custom in Ivalice? *Looks* …Their not natural! Kuro; No **? Balthier; *Look bewildered at them* Feeny; *shot* Sorry!)

Maya)

Wait…I though it was Mara? *confused*

Majesty, but it is a wonderful one.)

IT’S TWINS!!

“BABIES??!?!” )

IT’S TWINS! Hazzah! …Though I wonder if Ashe will take this brilliantly of badly..

And I have no idea what Diar mean, but no matter. I has dictionary! I ah...just need to find it…and I can’t…

*Need to clean room*

Anyway, I loved this chapter! I flailed when I saw it updated! *Clings* And Holy Hells! This review is on its fifth page…ahh I missed leaving these types of reviews.

~Feeny

Yay you updated!

A rather interesting continuation. A bachelor's party, haha. Bet Ashe won't like that one bit in her current state.

And the part with Basch and Vaan was just so...weird. I always think of Vaan as a kid anyway XD

Keep up the good work!

*wishes to be the 100th review* Wow, it's been so long since I've read this story. Another great chapter, by the way.

Oh, the suspense! XD I couldn't wait to see what went on after that woman at Basch's bachelor party. ;D

whoohoo! so i finally read this great fic. haha. The first few chapters really made me laugh, and then the later chapters had me intrigued. At this point, what I'm really curious of is how Balthier would react if he learned that his "first" has a child. I love nono and the creativity you put in the whole marriage issue in the FF12 universe. The Landisian customs also somehow reminded me of some customs we have here.

And oh. I love Al Cid but his sister is quite the **. she's like the uber **. haha. and I hope *something* happens to Llyud and Pala, unless Filo wants to do something about it! I don't think this review would fully capture the "ride" i've been through after 11 chapters. All i can say is I'm looking forward to more! So, good luck to you and more power!

amazing, such a cliffhanger, keep up the great work and hope you update soon.

Can't wait for the next chapter! It is getting so very exciting!

Yes! You wrote more! I am absolutely delighted... and frustrated... at the quality of this work. You blend drama and humour so elegantly it makes me jealous. >_<

"Politely chat" my **. XD

~HM

Hey Amy,

Sorry I’m late with a review…but when you think about it, there is no deadline, muwhaha. Anywho, I try :B Gee this had to be such an adorable chapter, all of Al-Cid’s parts made me laugh and go “aww” at the same time. Ah, he’s a good guy though (YAY) but Iliana! Oh no, cat’s out of the bag now, and she’s off LOL (Poor Pala though!)

Another favorite scene was with Vaan and Balthier and the exchange of dialog and banter, haha just good stuff right there. *hugs for Balthier, and will not touch Vaan for he is Feeny’s LOL*

Speaking of Pala, her interaction with Llyud was hilarious. Haha boy is she mad, and even worse when she found Ashe was upset ROAR and Angel man XDD Ohh Llyud, just do as your told!

Amy!

Ah HAHAHAHAHAH!

This chapter is so great so far! (I have paused after the scene with Balthier and Vaan in the Sandsea to start reviewing)

Your characters are just so spot-on! Balthier is simply priceless.

Aw poor Al-Cid, I actually feel sorry for him... darggh! Iliana you B*! *lol*

Get her Penelo!

Yay! Basch and Ashe are getting married!

Pala and llyud are going after her! Oh I can't wait to see what is going to happen in the next chapter! I love the end and really want to see more of those two. :D

As always, a great chapter Amy! It was all so very well written. I have to say my favorite parts were smug Balthier at the beginning and the glimpse of llyud at the end...I don't know what it is... but he just seems so cool!

Very much look forward to the next chap!

xoxoxo

~Georgia~

I remember having this on faves, but I definitley removed it... I still keep checking back to see new chapters. I do that with a few fics. I had it on faves for easy reference but now I realise it's at the top of the list when I put the M filter on FF12.

Okay.

I want you to know that this isn't a flame. I'm going to put this across in the nicest way I can. Whereas I think your story is good, as far as fanfiction goes, I think the plot is kind of farfetched. And where as the characters may be in-character in the narrative, the story revolves around Basch, Ashe and Fran in a plot that doesn't suit them.

First of all, Viera reproduction is the same as Hume reproduction. As is Seeq and Bangaa reproduction. There are male Viera, they live in a seperate village to the female Viera, and are incredibly sparse. They only meet with the females to breed, and then return to their own village. Though it isn't mentioned in FF12, there is definitley a male Viera in one of the FF Tactics games, that take place in Ivalice, also. There is one male Viera definitley in Tactics. It's the same case with the Garif. Fran would know this. She knows basically everything else, it seems quite... Unfitting that she wouldn't know.

Okay. Second of all, I'm well aware that you're a Basch/Ashe fan, but... Whereas I'm not really against the pairing (well, to be perfectly honest, I'm getting a bit sick of it appearing EVERYWHERE on the damned first page)... It's very, very, very incredibly difficult for me to believe that Ashe willingly wants to marry Basch and have his child. Also, chapter four, how can she have 'always have' loved him when a year or two ago she thought he murdered her father and brought her Kingdom to ruin? Or when, as a matter of fact, it was her (somewhat hypothetical) baby's uncle who killed her father? How can she be willing to love him at all? Yes, throw your subtext or 'shut up I'll do what I want it's my story and pairing blah blah blah' crap at me, I can't see it. It was only about two years before your story that Rasler died, and after being widowed, especially at such a young age, Ashe wouldn't be jumping into bed with a guy who's only real connection to her is to protect her and her country. In fact, she wouldn't be jumping into bed with anyone after becoming Queen. She has more class than that. I just can't see her getting knocked up with his child. Sure, they were friends at the end of the game, and blah blah blah she knows he didn't kill anyone blah blah she misses him blah (I'd miss my friends if they were all the way in Archadia!), but, I can't see them being in a real relationship and marriage. Not so quickly after the end of the game, if at all.

(Just so you know... The only Basch/Ashe I really actually like is the sort-of-fluff stuff where there's no kissing or hugging or touching or soppy crap, and it's about his dedication to defend her. Not that it really matters, to be honest...)

By the way, grammatical error in chapter one: "Pregnancy." correct Larsa - should be: "Pregnancy." corrected Larsa. I found a couple more errors but my eyes are getting sore. Just a suggestion - when you spellcheck, make sure to read back every single word through again. Spellcheck does affect grammar sometimes, ie. the correct/corrected example. Make sure everything is flawless before you upload.

Otherwise spelling is actually spot on. As is description, the words paint very good images. The only problem I have is the plot really.

Well. I'm off now.

--LuthienSky, over and out!

(P.S. I have a bad feeling that your friends and followers are going to throw hate at me for this review. Ah well... I better have my fire extinguisher ready.)