KibaHina FTW!

This story was greatly written and also i could understand it really good and picture it in my mind. KEEP WRITTEN! I WANT TO READ MORE!

i like this i think it would be a cool sequal
lol
the look on nejis face if he knew

omg... the ooc for bolth of them =]... but it was alot better then most and i liked how you didnt make naruto be a total jerk... you know just himselfe but major kawaii at the end. Such a pretty wuv story it was awsome =)

this was like my first lemon and it was just.. wow. Your a wonderful writer. ^^ u earn a muffin!

i love it

Awsome and amazing would be an understatment, That was just.. There is't really a word to describe how well written it was.

nice lemon

That was...wow...amazing.
I actually really like the Naruto and Hinata pairing, but when you look at it from this perspective, Naruto really is breaking her heart...and Kiba will always be there for her.

I saw on your profile, the pairings you hate. NejixHinata is GROSS. they are fisrt cousins, yeah. I agree with most of your pairings, except maybe the yaoi...it scares me.
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SCARY PAIRINGS IVE ACTUALYY SEEN:

NejixKurenai (do they ever even meet?)
KisamexKurenai (Shark man + sharingan copier?!!)
AnkoxJaraiya (The hell?!)
HinataxGaara (The fawking hell?!)
NejixSakura (Just...no.)
...and other...disturbing ones, yeah.


I write too, mostly Neji and Tenten, but I lost my stupid password for .
so check me out on ?
search:
MyoukiAkuma

not bad, and a pretty good lemon

YAY! i LOVe kibaxhinata and i love your story, and it is everything i have been searching for for MONTHS! (well, ok, maybe just today, but...) i always imagined something kinda semi like this, ya know, where naruto is an idiot and goes for sakura, and kiba ends up with hinata (their so sweet together). Theres nothing wrong with the story, but there're a few places with gramatical errors (heehee), which i have taken upon myself to point out to you, if you don't mind.

first of all, there are a few places where you forgot periods at the end of sentances, but im not going to take the time to point all of them out. anyways, here we go- (don't kill me for being nit-picky, k? you don't have to change all of them, cuz you can still understand the general picture, which, btw, is amazing, but..yea.)
it says "...people can't help who they fall I love with", and a little after that, it says "a strIng determined woman..." and all that stuff. and there should be a comma after strong (a STRONG, determined...)
and then "cam" instead of "calm" (lol. that one made me laugh a little,^o^. no offense. i mean, we all make mistakes right? what i think is completely ridiculous is that im really good at catching other peoples mistakes, but when im proofreading my own, i just kinda skip right over them ^^')
and (sorry, i know, im nitpicky, but im just tryin to help you, ya know?) it says "her heart for some reason seemed to beat up as she..." first of all, her heart shouldn't "beat up" things, it should "beat faster" or "sped up" (you probalby just mixed those two while you were writing) or whatever else you wanted to say, and there should be a comma, like "Her heart, for some reason, seemed to beat (faster), as she..." or "for some reason, her heart ... *COMMA* as she" (i should totally be an editor when i grow up. that would be way cool. sorry, random thoughts.)
then (dude, im totally on a roll here. normally, i wouldn't bring things having to do with commas up but... hey, your getting constructive critisism :D)"HE was always there for her (or i guess you COULD leave it out, dun really matter that much), (

WOW! that was a great fic :D Saku-chan (SassySaku) recomended it to me since i have to write a lemon for my story and i have no clue how to make one T.T I have to take notes form yours since its really, really good!

I loved this lemon fic!

Panda-chan

I thought it was really good! I'm a narusaku supporter so I'm happy that you snuck some of that in the story!! it was good and nicely written, i agree that its hard to write these kinds of scenes with Hinata because of her natural shyness but i thought you did a good job. :)

I loved it!
Kiba deserves someone, and Hinata is a great catch!
The only flaw I can find are typos but other than that a great fic and a great lemon!
I hope you make more Kiba lemons

It wasn't bad at all! it was really sweet actually. Don't put yourself down.