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| Feezlekahn 2008-03-30 ch 1,  | abuseMy initial reaction is that this could use another draft. Some of your descriptions seem clunky to me. But as I understand it, you wanted to put this up while you still had the gumption to do so, thus you might all ready be aware of this. And your descriptions of the two lead characters seem fine to me. As for the story itself, I really don't see anything wrong with it. Maybe tweak some of your descriptives toward the beginning with the rain, wait I said that all ready. So yeah, the plot itself needs little to no work. Of course if you don't continue this you may find people a bit annoyed. You did manage to get me interested enough to want to know where this story is going so I have to guess others will too ^.^ |
| The Power World Authors' Gu... 2008-03-29 ch 1, | abuseThis story is one of those very few that show a serious way of life in the ignored corners of FFX. Your endeavor was great, and I praise you for that. Your narration's excellent, and your character-making and making them interact with each other is perfect. To summarize all these, I'll say..this is one of the best drama fics I have ever read in the FFX Archive. |