Seriously, what makes you doubt that you are better than me in writing battles? This thing right here was effing amazing! I'm going to really have to work at it over the next while to make sure that I can top you and your epic battle-writing skills. Damn, I'm gonna have to steal Riku's Sun Shield and possibly rename it, but it's going to end up being pretty much the same thing.

I've got my work cut out for me. I've been writing too much filler and fluff and not enough action.

You have been warned. For the Alliance!!

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Shire Folk

Well, as expected Sora was portrayed to show actual dark emotions his young self would not allow himself to think for the sake of his friends, now that he's growing up.

That was epicly awesome chapter! So sad! Sora and the gang should forgive them! Please! Please! Please! Update soon!

THERE WE GO!

Now THIS is more like it! A nice update that kept me reading all the way through to the end, wanting to know what was happening, and making me feel enraged at what Kaiser did to Rain.

I was able to figure out long before this chapter that Claudio and Rain were Immortals, and it wasn't too surprising when it was revealled. I can sympathize with Sora and the others, and grudgingly accept (that's the word you want instead of 'except') their actions. But they'd better forgive - and Rain.

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Shire Folk

Nice story!

Coke is better than Pepsi!

All those introductions were making my head spin! And how do Ed and Al know Auron?

Anyways, I can't put all I want to say into words, so I'm just going to sum up the story. AWESOME. And, the next chapter seems to me to be promising itself to be your best so far.

BTW, I wonder if, later, I could steal your choice of name 'Form Manipulation' or whatever, to title the ability of changing the element into whatever you want. And I'd also like to steal a few of your attacks too if you don't mind.

As well, that attack that Kairi used against Rose's Heartless made me instantly bolt upright in my chair and mutter 'Oh my God, he stole Penelo's Quickening.'

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Shire Folk

I would have liked it if you'd considered asking me about using some of the attacks I created for Riku as well as his power of Dawn, and practically stealing the scene in the simulator from my story. I would have told you to just go right ahead anyway, but it would have been nice to give me a heads up or something.

Anyways, that aside, it was a great chapter. I just can't believe that you brought in the Hollows. They're going to be a major pain in the butt.

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Shire Folk

HOLY... MOTHER... OF GOD...

(Drops onto knees) I am not worthy! I am not worthy! You surpass me!

A have to admit though, I loved the Snake summon. "Otacon, I'm standing next to a kid with big feet who's using a key as a sword."

However, there is one thing I have to bring up. You keep forgetting that the words 'their' and 'our' are the ones you want for group possession instead of 'there' and 'are'.

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Shire Folk

It's Snake from Metal Gear.

I'm touched, you mentioned me.

Wow, that's a long title for Kairi. I didn't come up with something like that even though I could have, but I thought that creating her entire family and a brand new castle as well as slowly rebuilding her world would be enough.

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Shire Folk

Well, since I know know Creed's powers, I can be absolutely sure in my reasoning that Edward Elric is going to be the one to kill him, just as he killed that homunculus in the anime who used the carbon in his body to create a diamond-hard shell on his skin.

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Shire Folk

Okay, I'm going to review. Awesome battle chapter, though I would not be surprised if the families are scarred for life.

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Shire Folk

Like Woohoo? Looking forward to the next chapter!

W00T FINALLY! Dang that took a while but it was worth it awesome chapter i can't wait to see what happens next
Hermitgenius-

I hope you get back to periodic updates

HELLO

Sorry for not leaving my final review earlier i decided to give Fullmetal alchemist a try after reading your fic. Love the manga and anime already so here it is my final review

I first checked out your story looking for a read that will keap me entertained for a while what i found was an amazing story that got me hooked by the 4 chapter I Love all the aspects of the story the grammar could use some work but i am not so great with it myself. THis particular chapter was entertaining to say the least. The ooc's are orignal ((except for Starxys that making him similar to demyxz was a good idea in its own right))I hope you update soon


YOur biggest fan sighing out hermitgenius