That's a great song for Edward..For once I'm the one that hasn't heard of the song you do...lol. Great job!

I thought that was nice, but I have a few suggestions. First, I don't think you should put the words of the song in your songfic. I think you should have that it is a songfic and which song it's based on but not the words because they're distracting and few people read them. I like how you generally did Edward, but I didn't get the sense of constant thought and the heaviness of what he was trying to do, or not to do. I also think it needed a little more meat and detail to show that it really is Edward thinking and not some random person talking about random things. But I really like how you brought his mother in!