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| Pjazz 2008-04-20 ch 1,  | abuseJust wait till Derek watches 'Twins'. Or the one where Arnie's pregnant, Lol! Nice work. The final line was Lol funny! |
| Spicycute199 2008-04-18 ch 1, | abuseHAHAHAHA! Wow, This is Hilarious! |
| Lynnda 2008-04-06 ch 1, | abuseLMAO!! This is so funny!! Awesome job, thanks for sharing. You've a wicked sense of humor. I love it!! |
| Nvrmore 2008-04-02 ch 1, | abuseIt's a silly story, but the last line made me laugh out loud - a lot. Thanks for that. Thanks for writing and sharing with the rest of us. :) Hee hee hee |
| Kevrules92 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abusethe ending was funny |
| Chris St Thomas 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abusethe governator...firefly! hillarious. you rock |
| BenRG 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseXD That's all I can say about this: XD Of course, on a more serious level, there is every reason to expect the Terminators to have fully-human 'twins' upon whom their camoflage pattern were based. Cromartie based his on an actor whose image he saw in the plastic surgeon's office after all. Thanks for making me crack a smile. BTW: I loved Derek's reaction. One of these days, his over-excitability is going to cause the crew serious trouble. BenRG's Rating: 7/10 |
| Dracaspina 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseThis is great! It mae me laugh. |
| Metroid13 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseAlthough the content of the story is solid (and even humorous in some places), your writing abilities leave a lot to be desired. Sentences are kind of stale and they lack the drawing element that makes stories fun to read. They get to the point way too quickly, for example. In terms of grammar and the like, I found plentiful mistakes, particularly in spelling and use of devices. To name an example, I noticed that you switched from past tense to present tense in some areas. That's a huge mistake, and you really need to settle on the time-frame of your story to make it more effective. Grammar wasn't so great; I didn't see too many commas or anything to help out those sentences, for example. There was also the whole "You're files" whereas it should have been "your files." You really need to work on your spelling. Re-read every paragraph after you write it to make sure what you've written makes sense. For example; "Derek was board." See the error? Also, there's a huge error that should be cleared up: Ahnuld was born in Austria, not Australia. I know they sound vaguely similar, but the cultures are so different that pointing out that mistake is very much justified. In terms of actual content, the story was alright. A humorous one-shot, but I only really smiled when I saw the Firefly reference. |
| SinClaire 2008-03-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseJust to let you know, Schwarzenegger was born in Austria. Not Australia. |
| Tpolich 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseits was pretty good then i hit the last line now that part was really funny. Good stuff. |
| agent-shinobi 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseHa Ha i really enjoyed this...a lot. i was also thinking about something like this. i hope you make a sequel to this addressing the Firefly episode!Gosh this me up. |
| Max 2008-03-30 ch 1, anon. | abuseGreat fic "So the house was quiet once more. At least until next month, when Derek caught an episode of Firefly." It would be so damn funny if Cameron admitted to actually being on the show. ... Derek: "What!?" Cameron: "A power surge resulted in me arriving too early." Derek: "And!?" (blank stare from the terminator and then a blink) "I got bored and they allowed me to harm humans without having to worry about police." |
| Paul C. Gaunya 2008-03-30 ch 1, | abuseLMAO! That was pretty damn good. The problem is...you beat me to it! Love the ending too. P.S. Keep working on the virus story too. |