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DemonUntilDeath 2008-08-27 ch 1,	abuseAh, that was a good story! I liked it - especially Yomi's specific thoughts and the way he thought about everything. It was really interesting!
Killingmemory 2008-08-03 ch 1,	abuseYomi is totally deserving of more good fanfiction. Like this.
borderline-mary 2008-06-07 ch 1,	abuseHoly crap. I don't know exactly how I managed to not read this before, but it's lovely. The intricacies of Kurama, and Yomi's knowledge that he'll lose because what he wants can't happen . . . squee. Amazing characterization, and gorgeous narrative.
BlueUtopiah 2008-04-11 ch 1,	abuseThis was just beautiful. You really illustrated Yomi's obsession with Kurama effectively, without turniong him into the typical stalker or rapist he's so often portrayed as. Yomi just wants possession...and what he doesn't understand is that no one can truly possess Kurama. I loved Kurama's quiet diginty, and his tender patience. I can feel everything you've written - including the burns on Kurama's hands - he really is a masochist, isn't he? "he adapted with amazing flexibility to rapidly changing circumstances, even before he understood the advantages he seized." So very apt. Again, I adored this.
Adi88 2008-04-02 ch 1,	abuse“For all his boasts, Yomi never felt his blindness more keenly than when he stood in Kurama’s presence.” - Mm, yummy start. I already want to hug him… and he’s either going to do something nasty to try and put himself back on top, or this is just going to a place where he’ll progressively need a hug more and more. Also, bugger this, I’m reading through. Damnit. One line. As lasting goes, that’s… not. But in earnest, the power-play that’s so delicious about these two, and right off… the other half of the hug is I kind of want to protect him from just the feeling that must give him. Not fun. Holy shite. And now with the actual reviewing. But man. That is… powerful. I think it’s the perfect word for this. Powerful. It fills up your whole chest, you know? “Kurama rendered all of Yomi’s plans no more than stalling tactics.” - Win. So much of it. That’s another relationship-inna-sentence kind of thing. So lovely and eloquent and condensed. “Yomi had admitted long ago to himself that Kurama could never be broken, and with such a person, he could never be completely satisfied. But if Kurama would at least offer a concession, a compromise—any sign of submission, without a sea of deception between them.” - And I love that so much, that and all the stuff following. God, the dynamic you nail between these two… Yomi so head-over-heels in that-thing-like-love that he’s willing to settle for halvsies, and you have to figure he’s that into Kurama because he’s the one person of whom half is worth it. And Kurama is just so incredibly complicated. Too much so for his own good. “They were only necessary for as long as it took to play on Kurama’s level to get Yomi’s point across.” - This… whole thing. The fic. With Kurama all captive and whatnot, and it’s Yomi who’s standing there with his heart in his hands in the best way he knows how, which… is just not good enough, and probably making it worse but at least making Kurama notice him… notionally… and he can’t even say what he wants because that’s cheating. Not to mention leaving himself even wider open than the hands-in-heart thing. The hands-fantasy. The whole thing. Pulling it all would be pretty cheesy of me in space-filling terms, but it so epitomizes how incredibly creepy and endearing Yomi is here. Plus, hands. Well, that and “He waited respectfully for Kurama’s hand before he would make any advances, in part thinking this behavior most pleasing to the fox’s sensibilities, the surest way to win him over.” That incredibly twisted self-servicing, almost courtly sort of thing that gives the fairy-tale flavor. Like again later when he wants to back up and doesn’t. “I wish these weren’t necessary; If only you would accept my feelings for you, all could be well.” - Because that’s where I had such a Beauty and Beast squee it’s not even funny. ‘TONIGHT will you marry me?’ Significant absences. “He was too wary to make any further moves before Kurama took a stance and revealed his intentions first. Kurama, however, had remained the same as the first day.” - So diabolical it hurts. God their back-and-forth, and Yomi can manage to lost just by winning. The standing with his back to the door… I Dare You. Kind of thing. He’s gone deep inside. And Kurama touching the wards, because… he’s Kurama, talking about people crying for him… and Yomi wanting to stop him. God these moments. You fuck my mind so hard. “Do you think they cry over me, I wonder?” -Because it’s just one of those lines. “You have the technology, don’t you? Some tool finely tuned enough to take away only their memories of me. Something to take away all their memories of me, forever.” “Kurama. I don’t know what you’re talking about.” - Because that is such a creepy notion that I really want you to write it, for one thing, and him saying it is so… well, it’s Kurama. All the crushed-in bits of it that he means and doesn’t mean and thinks he means. Possibly. Because he is a guesser. And Yomi… doesn’t get it either. “You’d like that too, wouldn’t you?” - Because it’s so plaintive and now I wanna hug him, but. Well. Yomi is not wrong in that that’s just a monumentally stupid thing to do. But… with his hands and halfway-meeting and thin-getting… damnit. You could just guess all freaking day. And also not care any longer, eventually, because pretty, which is what Yomi has to worry about… “It would be what you want, isn’t it? To possess me—all of me—for yourself only.” - …There’s really not much to say to that. Just… mindfuck. I feel like a rat in a maze. And Yomi is so freaking LOST. Only he… I honestly have no clue, and Yomi is sure enough to lose everything on this in the paranoia. “Kurama rested his forehead against Yomi’s chest, a silent plea more satisfying and tempting than any preceding it.” - Because… wow. First of all, the image is too lovely. And… mm. Yes. Double-edged blades for all. “He thought of enfolding the thin shoulders in his arms; he thought of taking the not yet fully-grown hands in his own and soothing the burns as he had imagined before.” - Just like with the hands-fantasy before. I don’t what it is about these things that make me all melty, but it works. And also makes me nervous. And then his actualy reaction contrasts so well; I especially love the word “decisively” right before a facial expression. The per formative nature of it, the fact that he’s doing what he feels he has to and not even remotely what he wants to - the exact opposite, actually, because Kurama is sneaky/ Yomi just paranoid-ed himself out of his own victory - is so aptly turned on that one word. “If Kurama encouraged it—if Kurama desired it—no matter if Yomi had wanted it first—then it was surely a trap. Kurama’s suggestions could never be trusted, even if Yomi had been the first to plan them.” - And intellectually, I love you so much for this, because that is damn good shizzit. Good conflict, good characters, good mindfuckery. The impossibility of it… Yomi needs a compromise, but as soon as Kurama makes one, it cancels itself out because of their history and personalities and puts Yomi in retreat-mode. There’s just no fixing that, and no making it go away; they’ll back at this forever. Intellectually. Emotionally, I pretty much want to smack you, because WHY CAN’T THEY JUST FALL INTO EACH OTHER’S ARMS?! You know. And Kurama, in all his apathy - on-purpose defensive or not - just walks out, and all that… investment… I don’t know. I just can’t believe how you keep topping yourself.
ladyasile 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abuse... that was wonderful! ironic in a sense, too. man, you portrayed yomi and Kurama so well! the request that Kurama made (for people to forget him) was definetly captivating. nicely done! :-)
Katia-chan 2008-03-31 ch 1, anon.	abuseHoly shit... You know, being able to breathe through this would have been sort of nice. Once again I must applaud you, because I found myself having to hold still the entire time I was reading, waiting to see what was going to happen...the paranoia leaked right through the fic. And the ending...holy shit, I say again. Heart started racing and everything, and I got some really funny looks because I started shivering for a second. This is something I wish we could animate...watching this scene with background music and the like...well, actually no, that probably would have actually killed me. Anyhow, this is fantastic. You are the mistress of mindfuckery. I'm sorry this isn't a more coherent review, but I find myself a little too unsettled to write anything quite as eloquently as I would have preferred. You're a genius. I hope you know that. TTFN
Fawx 2008-03-31 ch 1,	abuseYou know, you're one of a very few writers who just makes me keep coming back for more. I've read this three times already and each tie there's something new there, some subtle hint leading towards the inevitable ending and damn it, I absolutely love you for it. You write Yomi so well. I can't really elaborate without sounding totally incoherent, so please accept my squeals of joy and rapture.
GoldenRat 2008-03-30 ch 1,	abuseKurama is so good at psyching out his opponents.
UpperClassK9 2008-03-30 ch 1,	abuseEm... Okay... O.o Kurama's really good at mind games. Yomi pales in comparision to him, that's pretty much obvious. (Kurama = mind game god) Since Yomi thought that that would be a good move, because no one would bother with Kurama again, why doesn't he try it? Hello? Reverse physiology?(sp?) Ever heard of that?
thoth-moon 2008-03-30 ch 1,	abuseMm--these two are always such excellent fodder for the mind games. Not much else I can say to add on to that.

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