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| ice-avenger 2008-04-02 ch 1,  | abuseaw!! it's so good! you should have made it longer, it's kinda hanging in a weird place... unless it's got another chapter or something> |
| Tia Ordona 23 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseWow! I never thought that someone would actually write the scene in episode 19 so it was...way more plausible! That was an important part of the series. Ed was about to give up, which would have sucked out loud for Alphonse. Speaking of him, these thoughts of his were all perfectly in character. I can imagine him trying to guess Ed's reactions and guessing their fate, when their mission for the stone had come to a dead end. This was a very nice scene, with a lot of thought behind it to make it deep and powerful. Thanks for writing! |
| Tears of Eternal Darkness 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abusethat was good. cookie? *holds out Ed and Al cookie jar* =^-^= |
| Forget and Forgive 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseAw, Edo was a little depressed in that episode, wasn't he? You did really good on this even though it's a bit rushed. I always love to read a (nonyaoi) moment between the brothers. |
| Nassa 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseI was very angsty (in a good way!). Yes Ed can be very emo sometimes, good thing Al is always there to shine some sunlight on his angst parades. As for concrit: I only found this "[...]seeing as I couldn’t actually breath." It should be breathe not breath. Breath is used like this "she drew in a breath", breathe is used like this "I can't breathe". Other than that spelling and grammar were great. :D |
| Anti-Logic 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseAh, so true...he did look depressed there. Really good job with this one, you captured their emotions very well. ^^ Although I have to say I've never heard deja vu defined quite like this before. Keep it coming! |