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| luv4peace 2008-06-09 ch 1,  | abusenice parallels u hav there, blends in well with the plot itself, though i hav to agree with fwee-howle, work on ur conversational writing skills, but great work nevertheless, keep it up XD |
| fwee-howle 2008-04-04 ch 1, anon. | abuse~Niilan A very beautiful composition. It is evident much thought was put into this work. Your word choice brings out the proper passion and pathos. I have one suggestion, your writing style is magnificent but the bubble that you created for the reader diminshed in size once a conversation between two characters began. Personally, I think that is your weakest element. Work on keeping the same strength and thought even while implementing some conversation. ~fwee-howle |
| Loverly Light 2008-04-01 ch 1, | abuseAi! This is so cute! I love it! T.T I particularly like the ending sentences. It's just... ah! I love it! Thank you so much for posting it! This is DEFINITLY going on my favorites. ^^ |