Wewt! Olimar! If he's in his original size I wonder how he's gonna help the others. Or is he Smash Bros. size and is really being attacked by giants?

That one really long paragraph in the Falcon part could be seperated.

When I got to the second Pit/Ness part I thought I was at a new chapter for a second.

Can't wait for the next chapter. :D

Haha, Sonic is so dumb it's funny. Well, he's not that dumb, but really, I like Shadow, Tails and pretty much everyone else more than Sonic.

Poor Ash too, that had to be traumatizing. I can almost feel his pain.

Now I wonder what's going to happen in Hyrule. Is Ganondorf going to fail and die and then have his dead body be possessed by the subspace stuff?

Nice chapter, but I thought Mewtwo turned good. And was still alive. Did you just make him dead for the story?

Can't wait to find out what Snake finds. (I read the next two chapters already, but I thought I would just review them all so I don't confuse anyone.)

This is an awesome story so far. It's really detailed, and I love how everything is connected, it really works.

The main problem with this chapter was the first few paragraphs. They could be shorter.

In the first paragraph if you started a new paragraph at, "And on the top floor of the castle..." And didn't start the sentence with "and."

The second and third seem okay, but the fourth has a major run-on sentence.

In the fifth you could start a new paragraph at "Mario took sight of his humble home..."

Hope my advice is helpful. ;)

good story!

Great!


Another awesome chapter!

I found one inaccuracy and that was Pu is actually spelled Poo. Other than that the story was good!

This is a pretty diverse SSE fanfiction. Most people don't know enough about certain games, so the characters from the game end up horribly OOC or key characters from the game aren't included. But you have broken said stereotype, and made a fanfiction worth coming back for! Alert'd

This is a Master piece!


Keep going!



SnakexSamus !


Yay!


Great job!