|Reviews for Forlorn Hope|
| afickleflakes 1/15/12 . chapter 8
that was really fun to read. :P
I'm really really glad that you managed to capture the characters' personas so well. I've been reading a lot of fictions from this fandom, and not a lot of them can snag the Winchester boys' personalities quite enough.
great job! :D
| AreYouSirius-questionmark 9/28/11 . chapter 8
thank you :) good story!
| Hunnique 10/12/10 . chapter 8
That was another superb story! You write mini-novels that I savour. Thank you.
| bhoney 2/22/10 . chapter 4
"Dean was never going to meet a girl, never going to get married. He'd never have a chance to see his children, see grandchildren. See Sam's children. Dean wasn't even going to be there next Thanksgiving for their ceremonial roast turkey TV dinner." This made me so sad.
And this made me laugh: "he could totally see Dean asking his bride to let Marigold be the Maid of Honor. Dean loved that sawed off shotgun almost as much as he did the Impala."
"Was she a stripper?" I was a little miffed that Sam would ask this. Glad he realized this: "He'd loved Cassie, a smart, hard-working, responsible member of society. When Lisa was a bad girl, he'd left her behind. When she was a working, single mother with a nice home who would do anything for her child, Dean had been far more hard pressed to move on." I think that says a lot. Very insightful.
And this was a lovely memory: "His Jess curled up on the sofa, thumbing through the pages, blushing when she realized he'd been standing in the doorway watching her. She'd been embarrassed and then she'd smiled. She'd smiled that knowing smile, full of promises, and he'd felt his heart swell with contentment unlike anything he'd ever felt. That smile had promised him love, comfort, joy, peace, family, stability.
Jess' smile had promised him his dreams." Aw...*lump in the throat*
Nice chapter. And things, they are a heatin' up!
| bhoney 2/18/10 . chapter 3
"“Just… hate it when old ladies yell at me.”
Sam smiled. “Comes with the territory. Everyone yells at us.”
“Yeah, but I can’t yell back. Yelling at an old lady is like yelling at a nun. You just don’t do it.”
“Dean, you have yelled at a nun.”
“Dude, she was a novice… or whatever you call it. A pre-nun. And she was evil. That doesn’t count.”" ROTFL This cracked me up. Especially the "pre-nun"-hilarious. I could SO hear Dean saying something like that. Great characterization.
And this was really insightful, and a very good point: "Normal. Sam still thought it would be nice to be normal.
Sam was the tall one. Dean was more average height. Sam was the scholar, the smart one. Dean made it through school. Sam was the one who questioned, who fought with Dad, who left. Dean stayed, did his job, kept plodding along. Sam was supposed to lead the Army of Darkness. Dean was just Dean. No special powers, no special destiny other than to look out for the brother who was special. And what had being normal got him? It got him orders to kill the special one if and when the time came.
Normal was overrated." Poor Dean.
Nice bit of foreshadowing to Season 4 here: "Sometimes he thought he was willing to kill anything and everything, everyone, if it would win this war and save his brother."
Oh, nice job bringing out the boys' issues here: "A person just didn’t go around acting like nothing was wrong when his life was on the line. He didn’t throw a party. He didn’t laugh it off." Yep, I can sense some Sam anger at his big brother. Nice how you always find a good foil for what the boys are going through.
“I suppose it’s a comfort that the necklace will make sure he drops dead if he actually tries anything." Um, yeah, I guess that could be a silver lining. A morbid one, but still...LOL
| bhoney 2/17/10 . chapter 2
This cracked me up: "“You eat any more dessert, we’re gonna have to put you on Weight Watchers,” Sam muttered.
“Don’t worry.” Dean smiled. “I’m starting to think I’ve got a tapeworm.”" I loved the reference to Dean having a tapeworm-I used the analogy, too, in my Thanksgiving series. I think it's a good one, and funny. It cracked me up here, how Dean held it out as good news. *snickers*
I had to love this, too. "He hadn’t blamed the pie when Sam had been taken to Cold Oak and he wasn’t going to leave it behind now." LOL That's Dean-loyal to the end. ;)
Loved the "meatloaf buzz," too.
"They asked us not to tell you. Said you’d be… unhappy.” Okay, I really, really want to know who it is-is it the Ghostfacers? I know you know-c'mon, tell me! :)
Really intriguing and complicated curse you've got set up here. It's a fascinating start to the case, I'm really interested to see where you take it.
| bhoney 2/17/10 . chapter 1
Ah. I love your stories.
"So many happy people. It was kinda freaking him out to be honest. He was used to being around a lot of doom and gloom. He had Sam with him all the time, after all. But the people they dealt with were usually on the exhausted, terrified, horrified end of the emotion scale. He knew what to do with them. Which was usually let Sam deal with them, because… awkward." Loved this-so perfectly in character and voice for Dean.
And this cracked me up: "Dean was thoroughly enjoying a plate of gravy that might or might not have some meatloaf hiding underneath it."
This, too: "Dean didn’t envy the waitress. He’d always kind of thought that a firearm might be handy in a job like that." *snickers*
LOVED the banter: "“I was going for silent and brooding,” Sam replied, “but thanks.”
“Sorry. Hard to tell the difference from the normal gloomy quiet thing you’ve got going on.” Sam glared and Dean grinned. “Right. Forgot to mention the glaring.”
“I save the glaring for special occasions.”
Dean snorted. “Right. Like when you’re…. breathing… or talking. You like it for lecturing, too. Did I mention breathing?”
Sam raised an eyebrow. “That’s what happens when your brother ignores two-thirds of everything you say.”
“Two-thirds? Is that all?” Dean raised his fingers as if he were counting. “Coulda sworn I was up to seven-eighths by now.”" Absolutely PERFECT banter between the boys. This is why it's such a joy to read your work.
I really hope you'll do a new story for us soon!
| Wicked Rebel 12/14/08 . chapter 1
haha... i like how sam's telling dean not to puke just as dean realizes he might!
| TheFreshApple 12/7/08 . chapter 4
Oh, please write something about Dean and John's fight... I'd love it.
| fearlessgoddess2 9/29/08 . chapter 2
Lol, I'm loving this! "Look up. Look left." "I think I might have a tapeworm." It's great!
| Anonymous 9/16/08 . chapter 8
I've been really enjoying your stories. Too many angst, etc stories without any real casefic base has made me a little bit jaded on the genre but in honor of the season I've been trying to read good based casefic that can have angst, etc. as long as it makes sense within terms of the story. You've done a good job of that.
One comment, I can see Sam's first reaction to seeing the couple's celebration being contradictory to the situation they are in but I think he would react a little bit more neutrally later because in canon Sam has always been so much about the importance of normalcy in spite of the other events in life. He fought so much for normalcy as a boy growing up. It wasn't that he was against their fighting evil but not at the expense of everything else. It's a healthy response that combines the denial of the supernatural as so many people do and becoming obssessed with it (in the supernatural world). In fact, during war situations is it all the more important to cherish the "normal" bits and happy moments. That's why they have the USO, and other groups. It reminds people what they are fighting for so they don't become too depressed or too obsessed. It's morale for the fighters, a reason to get up in the morning, and also a balancing agent so they don't go too far.
Sorry, too much analysis for just one little comment in the story. I think his reaction at first is very gut reaction but I would like to have seen a comment a little bit more balanced later. However, your fast paced story almost made me forget about this all together so I can see you wouldn't think about putting it in, or it wasn't appropriate to the way the story went.
I loved that the bride stood up to the ghost and told her about the price she had wrought on the family instead of protecting them. She was willing to stand up and die if that meant the end of the "curse" to her family because she didn't want anyone else to go through the pain she had seen her mother go through or the pain she expected she would go through.
| tylee17 8/13/08 . chapter 8
Oh hell, how're you doing it? making me laugh, then actually cry, then laugh, then cry (yeah, I could go on like that for a couple more lines...), and all the while you're also building up the tension like... this?
Great job! (well, apparently, AS ALWAYS...) (:
Maybe I shouldn't have read this before frigging 9/18, though... oh, never mind me... (:
I'm off drying my tear streaked face now...
| snangelbaby 7/25/08 . chapter 8
This was an excellent story. Great job on the story line, the descriptions, the relationship between the brothers, the borderline anxiety that you know they both have to be feeling most of the time when they aren't hunting, from sheer terror about Dean's deal, just excellent all around. And it's great to read fanfiction that it looks like the person actually knows how to read on a high school level.
Loved it. I'm going to go find all of your stories right now and read them all...
| JazzyIrish 6/28/08 . chapter 8
This was simply a fabulous, creative story. Loved the parallel between the newly married couple's dilemma (because she loves Mort, he is doomed to die) and Sam and Dean's (because Dean loves Sam, he is doomed to die). But let me tell you, that is one wacky family and they seemed to take all the craziness that happens with a grain of salt (pun intended).
Love the way you write the boys: the banter, the protectiveness, and the comfort. Your scenes flow so naturally, that I feel like I'm watching an episode - this would make a great one, by the way.
Thanks for sharing this with us - it was a real treat to read. Until next time...
| J.B. Burge 5/7/08 . chapter 8
I loved this story! I love that Dean is all angsty...and still making smartass cracks.
Thanks for writing it!