Reviews for I Dare You To Move

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Taylor5795 2008-07-18 ch 14,	abusewow not a lot happened but how dare alex go all superior! please don't let him get hurt!
Saynt Jimmy 2008-07-17 ch 14,	abuseO! Does Alex finally get his chance to shine?? I've been waiting for this moment for a long time!! ...not that I don't love George... Sorry I missed a few chapters there, I've been really busy with college and such. Paying for it is a **! Hello student loans! Anyways, another thrilling chapter, as always. You never let me down in that department. I can't wait for the next one! ¡Rapido, rapido! ¡Escribas escribas! Es muy bueno!
SheWeapon1 2008-07-16 ch 14, anon.	abuseAh you knew it was bound to happen, its just their luck that the cloak would blow off. Oh with spells and bullets flying about there's bound to be a lot of crazyness coming up. I wonder if K-Unit and Alex will be able to keep hold of their guns? The next chapter should be very interesting. I wonder who won't make it out of this alive... I guess i'll just have to wait and see. I can't wait to read the next chapter, so keep up the excellent work and please update again as soon as you get the chance. This story is brilliant! Really excellent writing! This chapter was worth the wait so keep it up! Until next time, bye 4 now! :)
Alyzabeth Tyler 2008-07-16 ch 14,	abuseK-Unit...at Hogwarts? Now that is something I didn't expect... This is a good story, never doubt that. Update soon...please. ^^ A.T.
Jusmine 2008-07-16 ch 14,	abuse"they barely fitted under it;" That should be "fit". "they barely fit under it;" "his eyes had become accustom to the dark" That should actually be "accustomed" there. And, of course, now Alex is going to kick ** and kill all the Death Eaters and Scorpia agents, right? lol. You're right, it did take you forever to write this chapter, but I guess I'll forgive you if you update soon. Okay?
monkeywithapen 2008-06-30 ch 13,	abuseso short, george!! good, but so short. can't wait for more =D
royale deep 2008-06-22 ch 13,	abuseHmmn, though I enjoy this story I have to highlight a few points. You might want to expand on the length of each chapter. Like over 50 words. Things seem to move all too fast, not enough time to explain things. Now I'm not saying this is a fully written novel but just take any book and look at how they take time to explain things. Who, how, where, why, when. We are also kept out of the loop in the pairings and they seem to be a few plot wholes; when Goerge comes back we don't really know where her brother came in or how he helped get her out. What was the actual point of her being there? How did Scorpia get in the schol, isn't it guarded? You should improve on aspects in the story. Keep Alex's overall character in shape. Why would Voldemort need to know where Harry is, he is in the school? The only reason he didn't come and get him was Dumbledore. How did Georgia keep Voldemort out of her head? He is a freaking strong wizard and she is a muggle. What does Scorpia need Harry for, it's no use since Dumbledore is still there. It can't help Voldemort any better to send muggles after them than wizards. But...apart from that you did a great job keeping the plot in shape. Just try to keep a hot climax and retain as much suspense as possible. Remember people respond to emotions and twists. The story takes too many without a well explained foundation to fund them all.
Insane and Logical 2008-06-21 ch 13,	abuseYeah!
x.Princess.Eli.x 2008-06-16 ch 13,	abuseAww bless, Harry is so sweet! I love your story, it is so great when you update... But isn't George like half dead? There isn't going to be a romance between George and Harry is there? I wish it was either GeorgeAlex or GeorgeGeorgeWeasley - haha - if I was chosing... Ah well, my rambling review is over...
SheWeapon1 2008-06-16 ch 13, anon.	abuseAw poor kid. :( sucks she had to die. Aside from that though this chapter was EXCELLENT!! plus i believe the little girl had to die, which sounds really mean, but what i mean to say is, that if she didn't die it wouldn't make SCORPIA as fearsome as Alex and George and everyone make out, but seeing as they've killed a child who could perform magic puts it into perspective for the rest of the students. Telling them that hey you may be able to do magic, but guns can still kill you. It gives Alex and George more purpose, which i LOVE! Excellent writing, loved every second of it! I can't wait to read the next chapter! It was nice of Harry to give them his invisibility cloak. :) Keep up the brilliant writing and please update again as soon as you get the chance. Until next time, bye 4 now! :)
Taylor5795 2008-06-15 ch 13,	abuseoh harry is such a dear! lolz well great intro chappie...cant wait 4 the action!!
Canada-Star 2008-06-15 ch 13,	abuseOkay, just one teensy question; how is Scorpia getting onto Hogwarts grounds? I mean, there's an enchantment on it to keep out muggles. Well, other than that, this is turning into a great story. Keep it up! *C-S
Jusmine 2008-06-15 ch 13,	abuseOh! It's helpful!Harry ! lol. Yeah, this chapter DID take a while. (glares) jk jk! Don't worry! Now I'm grinning! lol. Well, well, well! I didn't see any mistakes! Good job. :D UPDATE SOON! I want to see Alex and George kick some serious Scorpia **!
Taylor5795 2008-06-11 ch 12,	abusewhy is he lying?! whats gonna happen with voldie and scorpia?! ah! lolz
Canada-Star 2008-06-09 ch 12,	abuseMaha! Alex and George are back! And its crossed with Harry Potter! You genius, you! HP is one of my fave book series in the world! And then of course, Alex and George are there, just perfect! Okay...ehem...done ranting:P Cool idea! Can't wait for more! *C-S

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