Okey, the story is good. It's just you still have to edit your story like making it as paragraph format, not script format. (Just found out it's not allowed in

And the spacing and lots more.

Have a nice day and more power! =)

Hmm.. I really hope Elena shouted at Lay because of what she said:

Lay : (sigh) It’s true. All so true. Elena’s lucky he only dates Tamers, but if there’s a cute Keeper, this sometimes happens, say goodbye to her happiness.

(Hehehe. Does it mean Elena's not cute.)

Keep up the good work.
Okay bye! More power and God bless.

Oh you have posted it here. I really like these lines:

the quiet girl.

The unpopular one.

The forever lonely one.

I don't know, I just like it.
By the way, thank you for posting this story in my forum.
More power and God bless!