 Iliana11 2009-12-12 . chapter 2Yes, it is only chapter one that I am reviewing, but I am really quite enjoying this so far! It is quite enjoyable! I chuckled often. I'm curious to see what happens. I did, however, notice that you changed tenses a bit in the first chapter. The first paragraph is written in present tense, but then your sentence of "perhaps I might have been rescued sooner if I was worth more" used past tense for just a little bit before switching back into present tense. Great work! I can't wait to read more! |
 Backroads 2009-12-12 . chapter 5Nah, I thought this was a very necessary chapter. You needed it to catch up on character development before you blasted off into a big ol' plot. I found it very satisfying. |
 Valient 2009-12-12 . chapter 5Oh wow, this sounds so interesting.
Cant wait to read more! |
 Pimpernel Princess 2009-12-12 . chapter 5She turns into a cockroach, doesn't she? :D That could be interesting. This is a very clever story. I love how even though she is loyal to the dragon, she still is desparate to leave. Well-drawn characters! Your descriptive writing is great too.
May the muse be with you,
PP |
 Winteraeon 2009-12-11 . chapter 5Haha, very excellent! I love it and can't wait to read more! And yes, it is snowing up here in Canada, and it sucks! It was -40 with windchill last night and yesterday...Today was like summer at -15! |
 princess bookgeek 2009-06-19 . chapter 4thank you thank you for updating! I have yet to give up on you! |
 Aipom 2009-06-16 . chapter 4 Well written!:) Funny too^^ Poor girl turns into a cockroach... Obvious fairytale trait...Maybe she only turns back into a human at night? XD And remains a cockroach during daylight? Wild guess:P |
 Melissa 2009-06-09 . chapter 4 So I really like your story so far. I was surprised when I started reading it because it has really good quality especially when compared to other fanfics on this site (thats a really good compliment coming from me because I am pretty critical). The story is entertaining and logical at the same time. All I can say is well done. As for my predictions as to what will happen next here goes: Olivia will accompany Richard on the quest and Chrilton will modify the spell so that she will be human during the day but a cockroach at night. Along the way, Olivia and Richard will discover that they actually like each other, they will run into some obstacles (not sure what, maybe a bridge where they must answer riddles to cross, just a random guess), and they will finally complete the quest and live happily ever after! Ok well I hope this satisfies your need for a review. Keep up the good work. You will make a good author some day. |
 Mockingbyrd's Tune 2009-06-07 . chapter 4You're back! I enjoyed this chapter, though I couldn't remember the rest of the story. (Reread it. tee hee)
Fave line: "The speed at which he answers in the affirmative is blatantly insulting."
I feel like I *should* know how the spell will be modified, but I don't. Maybe a Ladyhawk arrangement? But then Richard would be changed, too. Hmm...
Anyway, hope to read more before the summer is over. - M.T. |
 Clara Spencer 2009-06-05 . chapter 4I really like the story so far, mainly the fact that the characters are mostly aware of the central fairy tale motifs that are going on around them. I'm guessing the spell modification has something to do with daytime and night time? Woman during the day, cockroach at night, something like that. |
 Ellsbeta 2009-06-05 . chapter 4oops. that review from faylinorse was actually from me. I didn't realize my sister was logged in and thought I was in my own account. |
 FaylinnNorse 2009-06-05 . chapter 4I enjoy this story because it's just fun. I hope write more soon, I'd like to see what she ends up as. My guess is chipmunk. Or dog. But I thought chipmunk first. |
 violeteyedkitten 2009-06-05 . chapter 4O! A quest! I can't wait for the next chapter! Kep writing! :D
Love
Kitten<3 |
 Pimpernel Princess 2009-06-05 . chapter 4Oh, this is good.
Your characters are very vibrant--I love how it's written in present tense. And the imagery of the dragon curled up reading a book is absolutely inspired.
As for the spell, I have no idea. But I can't wait to find out! |
 princess bookgeek 2009-04-30 . chapter 3I love it! please keep updating! |