 Doubleblade Miriko 2009-10-26 . chapter 1This is very lovely, I like the way you describe Judai, he's just like that! I would love to read more these kind of post series one-shots. Would youlike to write them more? Well, anyway, thank you for this. |
 Blueglaceon 2009-04-13 . chapter 1Yep. Now I know I'm going to learn Japanese and become someone who patrols parks and makes sure visitors don't get last. Maybe that way, I'll have a chance of seeing Juudai! Hoorah!
It was funny.
Are you going to try and shoot me again? NO...This time you're going to throw CAKE at me!
No! Leave Severine alone!
Au revoir. |
 Sparkly Emerald 2008-12-21 . chapter 1This was pretty cool. I didn't like how the series ended and this is a good sort of eilogue. |
 AlukaKaiserin 2008-12-20 . chapter 1 i'm too lazy to log in right now.
but this amused me greatly. XD
dunno what else to say. sry. |
 Artemis Ignitan 2008-04-12 . chapter 1This was good, I liked it. It fully represents the complete randomness of the ending, I wondered why and how Judai had ended up in some sort of desert as well. I can imagine this happening in the ending as well. |
 Violet Sea Glass 2008-04-07 . chapter 1I really love this fic, as you know~. You're style pleasant to read, and Juudai is adorable in his own Juudaish way.
Good job, and I wish there was something more constructive I could say. Srsly. |
 Sleic 2008-04-05 . chapter 1I just finished the series, I'm happy to have come across this fic. I look forward to more. |
 fallenxfate 2008-04-05 . chapter 1I'm Chinese-American and I can't tell Chinese and Japanese people apart. >_>
I quite enjoyed reading this, even if is ungodly early and I have yet to actually start thinking. Good concept (it really was asking for it) and just, y'know, a funny bit of what-if. (:
The only critique I have to pass on is a grammatical one. In the first half of the story, you put in a lot of sentences that you use commas in the middle of, but some of the commas should be semi-colons, I think. (I... kinda never did remember when you were supposed to use semi-colons, though.)
IE: "He drank again anyway, lukewarm was better than nothing at all" would probably have a semi-colon instead of a comma.
But that's really just me being picky. Overall, great work! (: |
 Fenikkusu Ai 2008-04-04 . chapter 1Nice job. You have a good grasp on writing mechanics and the idea was neat too. I also really enjoy when an author adds a splash of realism here and there. |
 roxasandsora 2008-04-04 . chapter 1coolys |