I really like how you draw on dialogue from the series to express the characters emotions...very Entertaining...

Cute chapter. Gippal kissing the other woman because she reminded him of Rikku, reminded me of a couple of books I've read. It was interesting, personally, to make that connection. The ending was sweet. Good job.

Okay story but kinda blah. It's rushed and doesn't have much detailing to it. Nothing that grabs me by both hands and pulls me in.
This story could use another look at and lots of improving.

Sorry but it's not alluring.

G.

pretty good, chapter, you grammer and Speaking parts need to be worked on a little bit, it gets confusing a parts, but it is still good. Can't wait for the next chapter. please update soon. :)

o really. cool, and cute, really cute. i cna't wait to see their reactions. please update soon. :)

I liked the memories used and that Shinra put a disclaimer of sorts at the end. His response was typical Shinra. Very funny chapter. Update soon.

Good chapter. Poor Rikku, can't cut a break anywhere. I liked the scene with Yuna's curiosity getting the better of her, about the bracelet. I really want to know what's in the sphere. Update soon.

o. interesting. can't wait to see what happens next. please update soon. :)

You need to use apostrophe for possessives. For example: Cat's fur is long. That signifies that the long fur belongs to the cat. If it read as this: Cats fur is long. Then it signifies all cats have long fur. This is not true because there are several cats with short fur or no fur. However if you use it incorrectly like: The green-eye's boy is at the movie. That signifies that the boy belongs to the green-eyes. Rather it should read the green-eyed boy is at the movie. Only if possessive or in conjunction (What is = What's; We are = we're; You have = you've, etc.) do you use an apostrophe.

I liked the switch in perspective and the back story. Paine throwing a bucket of ice on Gippal, was really funny. I like the ending of the chapter, I hope all works out, and Rikku finally gets to find out what the sphere contains. Update soon.

Love it. It's really detailed keep it up hehe

Rikku is too funny. Got to love her chocobo too. Cute. I really like this fic. Keep going.

oh dear now i can't wait for the next chapter awesome story though. :)

Dear Ashe-chan,

Update soon or I'll be really sad. Because the story is SUGOI!

Yours truely, Blizi.

Tehehe ^.^ I like your story! its really really good! make more please! pretty pretty please with whipcream on top =(