 Firebird41 2008-05-06 . chapter 3I'm curious...where did you get "Hides in..."? I mean, I know this is your first entry into the Naruto section, but obviously you do at least read the manga...I find it just a little odd. "Hides in..." I think what you're trying to say is "Hidden in..." though it is somewhat funny to say Hides in Crazy...Village Hidden in the Crazy...i don't know...anyway...
Oddly enough, the story itself seems very crazy; It's not what I'm normally used to reading, at least here in the Naruto corner of . So far, you've created three OCs, and you have met Naruto. The overall feeling seems disorganized, and very jumpy, unlike your RE 4 story with Trav (how is he anyway?). In that story it slightly clearer as to what you were doing. I'm not sure what you're planning to do, but at least you left it open enough so that, even though you are 3 chapters in, you can still change it to whatever you like.
I'm very curious about this, so i'll stop by again if you update. |