Ari's seven, nine and ten made me wanna cry but they were really good. Ari was always one of my favorite characters because he was so misunderstood and you wrote him awesomely :)

aww that made me not hate Jeb anymore :)

I was honestly starting to believe you were dead. You're writing a novel? When did this happen? I am so out of the loop...
Very creative. This must have been SO hard to write. We know nothing about Anne, so you had to make up everything yourself. For that miraculous feat, I applaud you.

I almost forgot how GOOD this thing was! Most stories that begin with 'Ten Things' usually only have a sentence or two for each. This is like a story. Actually, it IS a story. Best of all, you actually make things fit. Anne's chapter totally fit her. No real shockers. There were surprises, but everything just...made sense. Like how she felt about the flock, wanting to be a good mother, wanting to teach...it just all WORKED.

Wish James Patterson could read this.

Amazing. You're currently 2 for 2 on great comeback chapters! :)

My favorite line was "She can't deal with all of the self hate. It has to go somewhere. And so she pushes it off onto the experiments, the only things that she can think of as below herself." That's a gorgeous sentence. The end also, truly powerful. Keep it up :)

--Melissa

Sweet. I always think of her as 'bad' but i quite like th nicer side. Good work.

I MUST read more Fang drabbles! These are amazing...very, VERY nice job. I realize this was a very early chapter, but do you somehow still have the drabbles so you can put them in a reply? :)
Adnama

Wow. Anne had a heart. Almost impossible to believe, but you make it credible at least. (:

~eh~

I like this story a lot :D And if you still have them, can I see some of the other ones for Fang?
-rowena

good story! i like the whole idea a lot! but uhm fang doesnt hate red... infact he prob rlly rlly likes red, cause all of his "so called girlfriends" have been red-heads... so yah im pretty sure he doesnt hate red.

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I'm crying. Not a lot, but my throat's tight and I just sobbed a bit. That was so . . . so . . . *sobs* sad. I litarally sobbed there. I was listening to the song "The Little Things YOu Give Away", by Linkin Park and the main refiran is "All you've ever wanted is someone to look up to you". I thinkl that may have been the icing on the cake of emotions being altered by awesome people. And I still have that feeling in my throat . . .

I feel so /pathetic/. But, writing always makes me sad. Especially amazing writing. I do love this.

I didn't know there was more Fang . . . Cans I sees it?

I love how this turned out . . . it's chilling, almost and I'm sure JP couldn't have done it better, then again, his editers are the only thing keeping him from writing /Sues/, for God's sake!

But, back to the complimenting you. You deserve it. =). Lovely fic, even if lovely is the wrong adjective.

The pedantic bastard here to mention something--Val was Martinez in three but she didn't meet Alberto till five.