Fairly nice. However, I feel that if you are going to dedicate a fanfic to that one conversation that you spice it up a little more. If I wanted to re-read their conversation, I could very well play through my Radiant Dawn file or search it up online. Don't get me wrong; I thought what you did was all right. I'm just saying you could have emphasized so much more.

Nah, Jill wasn't too much of a crybaby. I think one of her personal downfalls is that she lets loose easy tears, especially when she doesn't want to. xD It just makes her cuter. Have you ever seen Mist's and Jill's conversations? xDD A good portion of it was blubbering!

thank you for this story. there isn't nearly enough HaarJill as there should be going around. she wasn't acting like a crybaby at all. but i don't really imagine her as being 19 in RD...oh well, i think i've been underestimating everyone's ages in that game. anyway, good work. :D

this is pretty good. haar is one of the coolest guys along with ike and ranulf

this fic was great! short, but excellently written. no extra crap, the story is just as long as it takes to tell what it needs to tell.

Well, even though I'm on Part II chapter 4, I risked spoilers just so I could read me a Haar/Jill. And I'm glad I risked it- I enjoyed it. ^^

I didn't think Jill seemed like a cry baby at all. Heck, if I was in a situation like that I'd be bawling, and I consider myself to be a strong person. XD And it wasn't some sort of sob fest, it was understandable tears of confusion.

I do have two questions for you. One: Where'd you get the name for Jill's wyvern? Two: How'd you get nineteen for her age? I always thought she was around eighteen in PoR...

Well, regardless of my lack of smarts, I liked this. Always nice to see some Haar/Jill love. And it's always a good time when you risked be spoiled. Hah!

Nice, writing a Haar/Jill one-shot to contribute for the time being. I approve! Thanks for the PM to let me know that you wrote this. =) Quite a pleasant surprise this evening.

I really enjoyed reading this. Sometimes when people write fics based on existing dialogues, it just feels like you're re-reading the original scene, but this wasn't the case at all. The dialogue was so secondary to the thoughts and emotions and actions. It was really great.

I think that you got their characters really well. Jill might have a hard exterior for the most part, but her emotions undoubtedly overwhelm her sometimes. I think that if she'd breakdown in front of anyone, it would either be Haar or Mist.

Now for a short lesson on semi-colons! (Hahaha~)
Semi-colons are used between a complete sentence and either another complete sentence or a transition word and phrase. So...

- "...the true nature of the laguz; when she had begun to question Daein’s decisions" should be...
...the true nature of the laguz, when she had begun to question Daein's decisions.
- "It made her seem like a child; a child that was completely beneath him." should be...
It made her seem like a child, a child that was completely beneath him.
- "...of surprise and confusion. However she could distinctly make out a small smile..." should be...
...of surprise and confusion; however, she could distinctly make out a small smile...

There was another mistake of that nature, too; it was two complete sentences separated by a comma instead of a semi-colon, but I can't find it now. I'd imagine that you get the gist of it, though? It's a really small detail, but I had to do a project on fragments/run-ons/comma splices last semester so I'm all about teaching that lesson. XD

Thank you for such an enjoyable read! I hope you get some more Haar/Jill inspiration in the future, perhaps once you're done your current multi-chap fic~

Yes! This is such a better alternative than actually working on my online class. Even if I don't have FE10 and have no clue what's happening. But hey. Its a FireEdge fic. I'll read it. :D

Anyways, very cute, I've always liked the JillHaar pairing. I didn't think she seemed too much of a crybaby...I mean come on, she's still got a sensitive side in there somewhere, right? :) I think it seemed pretty much in character, although I don't know a whole lot about Jill...but it seemed like how she acts.

Anyhoo, good job. I hope you are inspired for Defying Fate soon... :) But its just nice to see you around, and have a distraction from Chemistry. (hug)

A toast to sappiness! I think it was fine for the situation. I like Jill here, she does have cracks in that mask. And Haar's talk felt like him. That's nice. The atmosphere is good and Jill's thoughts were right on. I also liked the pacing in this story; it doesn't go by too quickly, but you don't make Jill linger too long on her thoughts either - she's kind of a spur-of-the-moment person, isn't she?

I remember this chapter. The first time I played it, I couldn't reach Micaiah (I wanted to beat her up!). But at least I got the conversation between Ike and the Black Knight, which is pretty darn awesome. The second time, I smacked Micaiah silly except that Ike corroded her Physic staff. Down the drain went 3750 gold.

But I never tried to activate this conversation. I never felt like restarting and for some reason I found much more amusement in using Soren and Thunder-ing her. Heh.

Sorry that this review is more about the game than the actual story. When it comes to gameplay, I tend to rant.

Until the next chapter of Defying Fate!

-EmbeRin

"It's difficult for young people to handle war, when they believe in the ideal that they are truly fighting for some higher purpose, that their faction represents what they believe. But too often the tides of war shift and turn, too often we soldiers, we 'fodder of cannon' must turn about and betray the very things we believe. It is nigh impossible to flee when you have a thousand spears pointed at your back, so you are forced to march forward and engage the enemy, even if those your commander calls 'the enemy' are in reality old friends from better times in the past... Jill must go through many trials, it seems, before she can finally grow as a warrior. I guess sometimes you do find an army that marches under a pretext that you believe in, and that hasn't betrayed you. It's in those times when you do what you think is right, and she's left us to help young Ike and company, as I once did... But, I cannot join her this time. Oh, my... There's Rolf standing before me... That poor boy... Let us see what he's learned in the past three years."

Oh, gawd, I'm starting to think like Tauroneo now.

Very, very nice. Jill does seem a little too whiny, but your analysis holds true. The poor girl has to handle both wars without even having the chance to truly grow up. A pity Shiharam died for the wrong Daein, eh? He left his daughter confused and dubious about what she's fighting for.

Well, at least one person enjoyed the fic. Quite a nice diversion from Defying Fate indeed.