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| Rose Tiger 2008-06-18 ch 4,  | abuseWe all love you too. Keep it up! ^_^ |
| ChristinaAngel 2008-05-10 ch 3, | abuseReally good! It's nice the other bits of the couples you include but mostly NaruHina. I love it so far, please update soon! |
| JouninTroublesome 2008-05-05 ch 3, | abuseEH QUICKLY IM IN LOVE (yet again, but it doesnt happen very often) YOU MUST UPDATE OR I SHALL gspasmtth = grab something pointy and stab myself through the heart |
| blazeyboy 2008-05-05 ch 1, | abuseTsukikari Kitsune dude or dudet.. you are completely aware that this stuff is made up?, and as such the stories are purely down the the writers imagination? no offence, but slating someones story is harsh and comstructive critisism my but.. and i cant spell, dont bother pointin that out to me ^^ CHARLIE LOVED IT RIGHT MORE OR ILL GET MEL TO BEAT YOU TO!! nd by da by, u need to have a fight coming up, like hinata batterin some waitress eyeing up naruto :P that owuld make me laugh. |
| Rose Tiger 2008-05-05 ch 3, | abuseWhat's going to happen next? |
| Rose Tiger 2008-04-26 ch 2, | abusePlease keep going. |
| computer2brains 2008-04-07 ch 1, | abuseOk, I think Naruto's going to work with Hinata and fall in love. :( -The highschool thing is highly overused in fanfiction. I'm the one 2 tlk. I like the story but I think you should switch it up and give its own uniqueness! :)Because Especially in NaruHina fics every1 knows that the r going 2 fall n luvv but they don't know when! :) My first fic on page people liked it because it was different from your average high school fic. Of course the ending was kind of messed up but yeah... :P -TWISTS AND TURNS ARE A AUTHORS BEST FRIEND!- critism from computer2brainy. :) - Hey y don't u comment my new fic (if you a SasuSaku fan with a dash of Karin and NaruHina) I just started but I got a couple of chapters up so far. :) it has slight bloody goreyness URL: /s/4178316/1/Sasukes_Redemption (loosely based off the manga) check it out!! |
| JouninTroublesome 2008-04-07 ch 1, | abuseIntresting... i like it... hehe you missed out on the M in home... lol, it says they stayed at hoe... hehe If your bored read my story "Born to be" |
| Tsukikari Kitsune 2008-04-07 ch 1, | abuseHmm, while I think that you did have a good start, I do have a few things I would like to point out. It's the characters, I think they're a bit OOC. Neji- he doesn't stare adoringly at anyone. He'll pay attention, but he's such a wall that you wouldn't really see much. Shikamaru- he's more a of a reserved person, I just don't see him whispering anything into Temari's ear, much less something that would make her giggle. Kakashi- Not bad, but he's not happy and cheery. His personality kind of a droopy-eyed and bored, if you get what I mean. He doesn't really get cheery. But I do think that you did very well on Naruto and Hinata, Hinata especially. More on the writing of the fic, I think you did well, but when you said "Everyone was now aware of Hinata’s presence in the corner of the room, with the exception of 8, and many of the boys were shooting jealous looks at Naruto, who was oblivious to the attention." I don't think that was really worded as best as it could. How about something like: "The room quieted down as the attention turned to Hinata and Naruto, the majority of the boys shooting jealous looks at Naruto who continued, oblivious to the attention." I think the number really isn't needed. But I think you did well, overall. |
| Rose Tiger 2008-04-07 ch 1, | abusePlease keep going. |