| Reviews for Tokka Moments: Serpent's Pass |
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DramaQueen of the moon 6/24/08 . chapter 1Love it! |
TiggerMusica 6/15/08 . chapter 1loved it, but you should make it longer and turn it into a chapter story. I felt like it was unfinished. |
Solembum13 4/13/08 . chapter 1I liked it. cant wait to read more. |
Pink Pagoda 4/9/08 . chapter 1This was fantastic! Can't wait to read more! ;) |
DANGERFroggy 4/8/08 . chapter 1i enjoyed it, i'll start with the bad first though, which is easily fixable. need need need to proof your stuff, if you can, get a beta, but there are a lot of mis-typed words, such as though instead of thought, misspelled anything (anithing), just little stuff that detract from the good stuff, which were your excellent balance of dialogue and description, you really have a knack for the social interaction between the two characters. also, i commend you for the realistic plotline, and using canon to your advantage. feel free to PM me if you want me to give you a more in depth review/proof, always happy to help form already good things, making them even better. |
Miyiku 4/7/08 . chapter 1This is really cool. Toph wasn't OC. I love the fics with fluffy moments between Sokka and Toph, but actually Toph is a kid, and I think that she is unable to understand a love or a crush with someone, since she was hidden to the world, and despite she is a powerful bender, and a very proud an sttuborn person, she is unsure of her feelings. And Sokka being so mature, I like that. He has to grown up in solitude, alone with his sister, so he became a man at a early age, but most of the time he's just making fun of himself. Keep the good work! |
supercdogg95 4/7/08 . chapter 1toph wasn't out of character! great job, so cute! |
godiwishicouldburnthischrist 4/7/08 . chapter 1really nice. I'm looking forward to more. |