it's very beauitful.

If I were you I wouldn't center the fic around the song, but rather work the song into the fic. Or else it's too choppy.

Love the actual song, though, not that that's very constructive criticism.

Aww...poor Lina... And who exactly was "he" ? Though I could guess...

And it's great to read a fic like this _. People usually run over ideas like this, never even thinking about it. That's why fics that go deeper are so much better .

ANGST! This is ANGST! And now I'M depressed! I can hear you saying 'then you shouldn't have read it', well when was the last time I ever listened to what I SHOULD have done? Bwahahah, this is really good, ya know, sometimes I envy you and AsheRhyder (can't spell her name!), you two have a lot of talent, as well as Pairaka and Silvertris (can't remember her name either), and you all could do something with your writing, I hope you continue writing. Now I feel guilty for not writing more on my unfinished stuff... so I'm gonna go and write, this was really good! _

Wow... Poor Lina