Reviews for Daughter of the Vanyar

Reviews For: Daughter of the Vanyar

Henry Plantagenet 2008-07-30 ch 4,	abuseI enjoyed this story - it reminds me of Jane Austen's "Persuasion!"
C.Angele 2008-07-29 ch 4,	abuseHey, I really like it! I can't wait until the next chapter is added :D. Sorry it took me so long to review this :/ Life's been hectic, you know how that goes :)
Hellga 2008-07-20 ch 4,	abuseI am sorry, but I feel that I am reading a retelling of Cinderella, not anything that has to do with Elves, let alone Elves in Valinor. The writing is good, I just cannot reconcile what you are writing with everything we know about Elven society and customs. Of course, that's just my opinion.
chisscientist 2008-07-09 ch 4,	abuseIf Amarie is common born, why did her mother object to the fact that Finrod is one of the more junior noldorin princes? This confuses me greatly. I could understand her objecting to the house of Finwe on the grounds that they are argumentative and attract trouble, meaning that Amarie is setting herself up for heartbreak if she joined them, but not on the grounds that her mother gives.
spacellamaprincess 2008-06-21 ch 3,	abuseWhat a charming story! I like the short chapters and direct scenes. It's all unfolding like a fairy tale. And like a Cinderella addict, I am hoping for interfering mother, wonderful new ball gown with intricate description, a magical dance, and lots of relationship-baggage angst. Fun! -viv
Ellie 2008-04-27 ch 3, anon.	abuseVery interesting back history on her family - it would make an interesting tale by itself. I really do wonder what kind of horrible experience Amarie is setting herself up for. hope life settles and you get to write more soon!
Lindale 2008-04-23 ch 2,	abuseA decent fic with nice description, but the whole idea of the Kings retiring is stupid. Amarie would also be alot more mature than you have portrayed her by asking her mother for permission, she is a grown elf. It is nice to see a 'what if', but this is not a 'what if' through the side of Amarie's mother being power hungery. Saying that, I did like the way you got Endore being dangerous incorperated into the fic. I don't understand how it works. Lindale
The Battling Bard 2008-04-23 ch 2,	abuseThanks for labelling this as AU :) You're a good writer and I don't want you to spoil it by trying to twist canon.
Klose 2008-04-15 ch 2,	abuseI quite like the idea that the Eldar Kings eventually retire, I'm not sure I entirely agree with the way you've incorporated it into your story (especically with regards to Finrod), but I applaud your originality! I'm sure Saralosse loves her daughter, but I'm afraid I can't like her too much - sabotaging Amarie's relationship because she wants to be the mother of a Queen? Oy vey, minor royalty are important too. (Just look at England's royal family!) :) Just a note... I do find the italics a tad strange - if they are thoughts, shouldn't they be in 'first person' - e.g. "All I had wanted to do was go to Tirion with my friend" instead, it just seems like Amarie is 3rd-person narrating her life or something. g If anything, I don't think you need the italics since they are more descriptions of thoughts than actual thoughts.
Ellie 2008-04-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseI am enjoying this story. It is an interesting and different take on the situation. Why can't there be Vanyar who desire power? Also, I am curious as to why Amarie's mother feels their honor needs to be restored. I wonder what happened to cause her to want her daughter to become untouchable by society by becoming a high royal. Who is to say this is against canon? We know virtually nothing about Amarie. Many people write stories to explore different ideas and "what ifs". This story is doing just that. Thank you so much for honoring me with your own venture into "what if"! The canon-nazis might leave you alone if you label the story AU. Otherwise you can just let them vent knowing that they are reading and getting passionate. I for one appreciate your story! Thank you!
The Battling Bard 2008-04-15 ch 1,	abuseGot to agree with eiluj on this one, the three kings would not just give up their crowns to the eldest son, so the only way she'd take a crown is to murder Indis and persuade her to stay in Mandos. And a Vanya would not be so power mad that she would want to dissuade her daughter from marrying someone because of power. Like a lot of writers, you're portraying the elves as pretty humans with human problems, and it is beyond ridiculous.
Beleth 2008-04-09 ch 1,	abuseEiluj, I think that the elven kings will eventually give the crown to their eldest sons, after ruling for a long period of time. I think this because, who would want to rule till the end of Arda(since elves are part of the world, they don't die till it dies)? It is a lot of responsibility for a long time. That's how I personally view the elven kingships in Valinor.
eiluj 2008-04-09 ch 1, anon.	abuse"She says that I should not waste my time and youth on someone who will never wear a crown. Someone who will never make me Queen of the Noldor." Who was it that Amarië’s mother thought could make Amarië the Queen of the Noldor? Surely until Melkor killed Finwë, there was never any reason to believe anyone but Finwë would ever be King of the Noldor -- just as Olwë would always be the King of the Teleri and Ingwë would always rule the Vanyar. They were immortal elves, after all, and death was all but nonexistant in Aman before the first Kinslaying. And all three of Finwë’s sons were already married... So Amarië's mother's attitude seems unrealistic at best -- or was she expecting Melkor to return and keep slaughtering Elvenkings? Sorry, but I don’t understand.

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