Cute!

such a cute one-shot.

I can see Bella thinking this... shoot I think this :)

So true! I am somewhat certain my inner 17 year old self would have swooned at the sight of one so very good looking! :SIGH:

Sandra

woah. Edward!

Bella has either a really good imagination, or she's truly over exagerating. Human Edward would be gorgeous, if he looked anywhere close to that as a human. Still, this was a pretty peice, but that's not Bella seeing the real Edward. She focuses on personality traits for the real Edward, but I do admit his looks are fantastic. Love your Blue Moon over Manka's! Keep writing it!

HI,
This is my first time to ever be on this site and your story was the first I ran by and read. Just want to say that your an amazing writer I absolutely fell in LOVE with you story Blue Moon Over Manka's. Was chapter 39 the last chapter, I was kind of confused there. Well thank you for such great writing it was really a treat to read.

I dont know how anyone would cope with a human blushing Edward

That was very sweet...thank you

i realize it must be difficult to capture bella's view of edward in only 55 words... but that aside, i was kind of dissapointed that you chose to write about his appearance. i mean, the title "bella sees the real edward" had me thinking she saw PAST his appearances and obvious faint-inducing charm; that she saw who he was inside. i dont know... i guess this fic just didnt really work for me.

i still think you're a great writer, and im only trying to tell you what i think :)

I've never thought about Edward as a human. I think I might feel faint as well...lol.

short but sweet.
I started imagining Edward blushing, i was practically hyperventilating... i let my imagination get carried away.

Smashing.

Human, blushing Edward could be more than I could take, too. Another writer, blondie aka robin, wrote a part in her story, first light, about an instance where Bella "sees" the true Edward, the way he was before he was reborn as a vampire. It's a beautiful scene and it actually made me cry!
Anyway, this short little snippet reminded me of that.

u oculd always make this one longer as well. like u did with your other one which i love and u have to update like right now
lol

Honestly this just wasn't doing it for me... and I think I know why. When I think short I think funny, if it's going to be all serious it's best to just go all out and write pages and pages and pages (and I know you can do that, don't be modest.) But, that's all personal preference so this shouldn't even count as a review more as a "I'm gonna feel guilty if I don't leave a review because I know review count means something" review.

Like always, 55 words exactly is always hard to hit so good job. For 55 words you kept the vocab at a great place.