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Kotali 2008-06-12 ch 2,	abuseConstructive critisism: - You might try expressing more of his thoughts while he explores; I can't think of too many people that would readily jump into a Bathyshpere after having been in an accident such as this. - You switch from past and present tense it the middle of sentences. Possibly consider a beta-reader? - There is quite a bit of time lapsing and inconsistencies in your narrative. How is it that only one man miraculously survives when you stated that only those in the life preservers would survive in the middle of the Atlantic Ocean? How is it that he was the only one who found the tower? Just food for thought.
suicycojr95 2008-05-20 ch 2,	abusenice wrighting but really short
suicycojr95 2008-04-14 ch 1,	abuseupdate soon i have high hopes