Very interesting. Quite a feat to write a romantic story with this pairing. Minor grammar mistakes but it was good.

This is great! JadexTear is now one of my favorite parings!

Lady!

This story was quote marvelous! I enjoyed every bit of it! It was a great work of art both emotionally and physically!

The tension was also perfect. Please, do keep up the good work ;3

~Sakura

^-^ I love your stories! They're so good!

No matter how many times i read this its still great.

*This was the story that got me hooked on the tearXjade pairing!*

JadexTear huh... I like that pairing! This fic was well done and very sweet. I was surprised, no make that shocked... that Jade died! Well thank goodness it's just a dream... Hope to see more of your work!

Oww~ how a beautiful fic!! Such a very good one!! And a JadexTear!! You make me happy a lot! =3

Sorry if this review its too emply, but it's because english it's noy my main languaje, so I hope you can understand me.

Oh! And added your story to favs, because its too great!

Continue writing fics like this! =D

See ya!

Akatsuki Miyu

Alright, first time I skimmed through, and from what I can see right off, you ARE improving at description. You've started to mix both the setting and the character's actions in a really natural way, which was such an issue before. Much better. ^__^

So, from the beginning afresh, going over everything with eagle eyes... I'll stop the lame narrating now.

Normally, I would comment on how I can't really tell what Tear's actually feeling about all this, how you've just given her actions instead of feelings, but she's a hard character to write. x_x You have enough to carry the scene along though.

Something I've noticed a lot in your writing that I've never commented on before is your use of emphases like 'rather'. This could just be personal preference, but I can never treat that word seriously. It comes off as glib and then I have to pass over the sentence if I want to read the rest normally and not start snickering. People rarely use such emphasis words as 'rather' anymore unless they were writing from POV as a character who does, and Tear isn't the type. (Jade's a maybe, I might be able to take it seriously with him.)

Aww, very good dialogue between Tear and Jade when she's healing him. Realistic, emotionally involved and best of all, you're starting to write dialogue with contractions! Congratulations, this is one of the biggest aspects of making conversation natural! Contractions! (Not that you don't use them all the time, but when you don't use contractions, it's very glaringly obvious. But this felt so natural.)

Very good transition from the end of the dream to her waking. Very, very good.

You switched POV's from Tear to Jade without any warning there. I know, everyone does it, me included, but it's not a good thing. I'm working on this, too. :/

Mm, I felt you rushed Jade into being all genius and having the perfect answer already formed as though he was thinking about this before he even saw her. I don't know, personal preference. It felt rushed.

Also personal for me, but two things with one paragraph. It's kind of like... Not only does Tear get the right of it right away, no confusion about her, no having to actually think about it, but of course it's Jade who makes her see the truth. I know this is fanfiction, but real life doesn't happen like that. This is all personal, and I would not be offended if you ignored this totally. You probably like things fitting together perfectly and everything being wonderful all at once, and I don't.

Oh, nice reaction by Jade. I love it. You wrote this whole bit right here so nicely. Well written both technically and emotionally.

Aw, that was pretty cute, good job. I've never really considered this a pairing, actually, but you handled it well. Tear and Jade were both in character and it was so cute. Good job.

*infinitely giant grin plastered to her face* I am so very happy right now. That was so adorable things I've read in so long. I love Tear's method of convincing Jade to speak. Mind you you can probably guess that that was going to be my favourite part. *still can't get the smile off her face* If only didn't shorten any repeated characters cause there would be a great deal of capitalized E's that I want to string together right now. ^.~ I can't believed I missed this one. Thank you so much for PMing it to me.

Aww, that was a sad, but very powerful scene.

Great work Lady! JadexTear is a great pairing, you write them so well.

Although I don't really care for JadexTear, I applaud you for your work. This fic is beautifully done, and the characters aren't OC.

This fic is a breath of fresh air, it's very nice to see something other than LukexTear.

I encourage you to keep up the great work, and I hope you continue with different pairings (GuyxTear maybe?).

~ Anon

Very...different, indeed. But with so many of the normal pairings out there, different is a good thing. I like the descriptions of this; very powerful, yet simplistic enough so as not to confuse the reader. Beautifully done.

Ohh, that was unexpected. It ended so happily from how it started. Your descpritions are improving vastily, and I'm still amazed at how you can manage to keep Jade in-character (I could never do that).

Excellent job.

Hmm, TearxJade? Interesting.

It was very cute and surprisingly IC (says one who, in the case of ToA, can't see far past canon; forgive me). The tickling bit was most amusing, I thought, for the thought that the two soldiers, of all the people in the group, should engage in a (one-sided) tickling war is just so ironic. That, and I can't seem to get past the fact that Jade supposedly has no ticklish points. I mean, sure it's only to be expected, but maybe he's just a master of concealing those points. I don't know. ::ponders::