Reviews for Repressed Memories

Reviews For: Repressed Memories

xSPUDx 2008-06-24 ch 3,	abuseOMG i just finished reading ch 3 and the flashback Willy had about the suspension, and the kids calling him metal mouth--that was soo sad! i felt so bad for young Willy and his terrible childhood experiences. and on a different note, i really enjoyed your Oompa-Loompa names--like Gabe, or Noro-Ron. so very creative!! and my heart stopped when Willy hit his head on the boat when he was trying to fall into it. OMG im going to definatley continue reading this fic. very well done so far!! keep up the wonderful work! --SPUD
Skrblr 2008-06-22 ch 5, anon.	abuseGreat chapter! The twist becomes twistier. Poor Mr. Wonka! But good job to those Oompa Loompa medics. It's interesting how he remembers some things but not others - are memories coming back to him in any particular order? Like, most recent first? Or most essential to him first? I like how you include some of Erin's thoughts, but not all, letting narrative voice tell some of them and keeping some in italics. Variety is funner!
Yva J. 2008-05-29 ch 4,	abuseAmnesia...oh boy that is a cliffhanger. Your last bit has 'you fell of the bridge', it should be 'off' not 'of'. Otherwise this is a pretty good story. I like what you have written so far, and am enjoying where you're taking this. Poor Willy, sitting there not knowing who he is, that's gotta be weird for him. I could see this one go off in so many different directions too. It's also a pretty unique idea, one that thankfully I haven't read before, so that means no way for me to compare it, and you keep me interested in a unique storyline, so kudoes for coming up with an original storyline. Looking forward to reading the next installment. :)
skrblr 2008-05-28 ch 4, anon.	abuseAha! I see! Complications rise like dandelions! Twilight. :) Catalines. :) "Ow! That hurt." room. :) Good for Erin, not being nosy! Yay! Interesting points about 1) what if he did die? 2) how much privacy does he get with Oompa-Loompas everywhere? 3) how much privacy does he actually want? 4) If he hit his temporal lobe, does he still remember how to talk? Apparently he does, at least a little - Where am I, who's Mr. Wonka. We eagranxiously await the next installment!
skrblr 2008-05-07 ch 3,	abuseCliffhanger?! What sort of malicievil plot is that?! I did like it, though. Flashbacks in italics are just fine, though I've read that kind of thing happening to Wonka a lot in his childhood. I loved the strawberry memo! That was brilliant! I also like how there were no pencil shavings. Cliffhanger!?!
xSPUDx 2008-04-28 ch 2,	abusethis is such a sweet story!! wonderful job..i'd like to see how this story progresses, if you ever decide to continue with it. but still, a very sweet story!! --SPUD
starryblossoms 2008-04-28 ch 2,	abuseThat was freaking awesome!
skrblr 2008-04-28 ch 2,	abuseAw, I almost cried! But I love anything that can evoke strong emotions, so I rejoice at the same time. Interesting take on his eating habits - that's always been on my mind. I learn so much about the psychology! Are you in school, taking a class? RSKs please me greatly. I can see where that last sentence would be hard - whenever there's heavy emotion, you want to keep it true-to-character, not dumb sounding, and maintaining the mood. A challenge, with this particular person. But I think you pulled it off beautifully! A, so sad! Marvelificient! “You scared the hornswogglers out of me!” yes, i did just laugh out loud. alone in the basement. Because that's such a great line! Okay, keep writing! Oh, wait. Constructive criticism: not like I'm one to talk, but beware run-on sentences. Make use of commas, even if English grammar says no. Sometimes you need them just to keep your readers un-confused. And check your tenses! "It's not nice to covered in jelly"!
lina 2008-04-28 ch 2, anon.	abusenice!very good!please continue!
skrblr 2008-04-22 ch 1,	abuseI like the present tense! And the whole corkscrew thing - made me giggle! If you can somehow differentiate this from all the other similar fanfics, it could be really fun to read. Keep it up.
lina 2008-04-14 ch 1, anon.	abusevery interesting start!can't wait to read more!
Yva J. 2008-04-14 ch 1,	abuseInteresting premise. I find it strange to read a story written in present tense, but you seem to write it rather well. There is only one part where you squeeze in a past tense reference. 'Wonka tells her hoping she will leave, the lady was making him uncomfortable.' The 'was' here should be 'is', if you're going to keep things consistent with tense. Otherwise, you're off to a good start here.

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