"The Colors os the Mysts" lol, os -> of.

The parallelism in the first paragraph had a nice rhythm and tone, but didn't make much sense if you *really* think about it.

I rather like your lyrical writing though much of it leaves me at loss.. "your kisses become scoff" scoffs? "loosing" should be "losing" Loose = a loose tie or knot, lose = lose someone, lose ability, etc. "understanding you is turn you human" turning. "I wonder you’ve never wanted to stay, once you’ve already had everything ready for your leave." Doesn't make sense to me. "our souls disposition is" soul's. "I cannot help but blame myself for your leave." leaving. "Guilty, sorrow and love." Guilt. "a little voluble" Voluble (from the dictionary) means characterized by a ready and continuous flow of words; fluent; glib; talkative: a voluble spokesman for the cause. Not sure if that's what you meant. If so, okay. "just as image and reflex on a silver mirror" reflection, not reflex. "or for just allow me to love only what I can no longer have" allowing myself.

Other than the mistakes, I really like the emotion you've put into the piece, and the flow. And the regret at the end.

Aw the ending brought tears to my eyes. Nicely written. One word I had no idea what you meant by, even after checking the dictionary: "cravlices" I think you mean "crevices"?

I also liked the way you wrote the first 2 paragraphs and the odd, yet simple, descriptions you used.

That was a perfect last line! Loved this whole twoshot, and you drew on a really good plot, that being, how miserable Godric might have been when Salazar left. T-T Very gorgeous, and rather sad.

It was nice to find a fic that focuses on two characters you don't hear much about through the series. The interaction between the two was believable, especially considering their history together (being rivals and such)--it wasn't the classic, cliched let's-get-together-cuz-we-hate-each-other fic. The differences between the guys strengthened their relationship, I think, and I liked how you used that to bring them together and drive them apart at the same time. Hope that makes sense. XD I really liked the way you used repetition throughout the fic--really drove the points home and emphasized the individual personalities of the characters. I would suggest a beta reader. There were a few grammatical mistakes--which is completely understandable, if you're writing in English as a second language. That's pretty much all the critique I have to offer, however. Brilliant story, very descriptive. Hope to see more from you. Nice. Thanks for the amazing read and keep up the good work.

What a powerfully moving and elegant story. I love both chapters, so tender and sad. Excellent job of capturing their possible feelings.

A rare, rare gem in Harry Potter fanfiction. I absolutely love this story, particularly the second chapter. The simple yet profound truth that we feel passion for things past and don't realize the value of what (or who) we currently have--you express it eloquently. This story will definitely stick with me. :)

beautiful! T__T

Wow! Yes, I definitely want the next chapter - Please?
And soon?
Yay!

Oi DarkAngel! fic em inglês?como assim? e para quem só tem dois neurônios como eu? não tem tradução?
bjs

oh, this is so beautiful, twin *-*