Things I liked:
Fantastic descriptions and I like how you flash forward a year
Aww, hearing that song is going to really hurt Kyo-kun
The interaction between Tohru and Kyo is so bittersweet and wedding ring? o.O
Wow that ending must really really suck and I can't imagine Tohru using a taxi when she's the kind of girl who would walk.

Ways to improve:
Use knelt instead of kneeled

Good fic
~Myst
Things that I didn't like:
brunette colored doesn't make sense since you would say brown colored or was a brunette. Blonde would work because blonde isn't really yellow 0.o it's a new color that I had to dye out of my freaking head and now it won't come back T_T I want my golden hair again!

Things I liked:
Excellent descriptons - poor Kyo
Aww it's sad how they won't tell him where Tohru is
The car accident must be really devastating to Tohru with her mother's death but I can't imagine her ever wanting to forget him
I like that Hana can sense these things
Aww, it's pretty sad how Akito's gone

Ways to improve:
Spelling error: "seprate" "lyd"
Strengthen the emotions

~Myst
Things that I didn't like:
"How much finger" - should be how many fingers
Tohru seems pretty OoC in this chapter

Things I liked:
Excellent descriptions
Lol, the rooms will inconvenience them for sure
Good way to end the chapter

~Myst
Things that I didn't like
"After repeating about the encounter"
"boys, wearing tan jeans and a green collared shirt" makes it sound like they wear the same shirt
How would their cell phones work outside of Japan?
Most popular couple, I doubt that o.O already? very unbelievable

Things I liked:
Good descriptions, poor Kyo-kun escape the rain!
Aww, it's so cute that he got her that bracelet
Lol, that was perfect timing to get her a gift
The Kyoru scene was adorable
Nice way to end the chapter

Ways to improve:
Spelling errors: "arounf"
Try to lengthen the lines they seem slightly sparse

~Myst
Things that I didn't like
Maybe put what type of thing he was saving up for
Why would they lower the price instead of raise it if they only have one?

Things I liked:
Great characterisations
I like that line: "I don't see the importance of all those other people"
Sixteen? Really? o.O Wow...I find that hard to believe but that might be because I live in Cali where there are two in the city I live in.
Aww, I hope everyone survives the flight

Ways to improve:
Try not to repeat words or phrases

Nice work
~Myst

Things I liked:
I agree with the cheap look comment
Nice descriptions
Cute Kyoru moment XD
That song does fit them
Aww, it's so sweet how she's singing for him, actually no that is down right adorable
I love how it was that song Tohru chose to sing
That scene

Ways to improve:
Balance verbal communication with nonverbal

~Myst

Things I liked:
Lol the girls remind me of both myself and others I know who go crazy over guys who are Japanese *remembers Kanji TA who looked like Mamoru in PGSM*
Good build for the next chapter

~Myst
Things that I didn't like:
To me it would seem they would wear more elegant things to the prom
Again with the class thing? Sorry but, to be honest, these things don't make sense to me

Things I liked:
I like the idea of the senior prom - my school had a senior ball and I didn't go to it, I did however wear a Lolita dress to my junior prom
Cute Kyoru scene
Aww Haru's account T_T what about his video game need?

Ways to improve:
Try not to repeat words or phrases

Nice build for the next chapter
~Myst

Things I liked:
Aww poor Yuki, I hope he can cook well soon
Fantastic descriptions
Aww cute line : "Everything's so perfect right now. I wish it would stay like this forever"
The Kyoru scene was adorable

Ways to improve:
Lengthen the scenes
Try not to repeat words or phrases

Really sweet chapter
~Myst

Things I liked:
I love how Uo's anger rises when she realizes she's with Kyo
Aww such cute Kyoru moments XD

Ways to improve:
Spelling error: "I though"
Work on characterisation

~Myst
Things that I didn't like:
I don't think they have warning bells in Japan, although I'm not completely sure
You put back in Japan, Kyo
Sorry this is bugging me: It should be in Hawaii not at Hawaii since Hawaii is a large place and not a single destination
Why isn't Hana calling Uo-chan Arisa?
I really don't think Haru or any of the Zodiac would explain the curse to them, they could have made up an excuse or they could find out the curse by accident, it just feels so wrong to me.

Things I liked:
Yay Haru!
Fitting character interactions

~Myst
Things that I didn't like:
Should be knelt instead of kneeled - and putting on his knees is a little redundant

Things I liked:
Lol, I love their reactions to the prcies
Aww, I like the description of the outfit - poor Tohru
It's so sweet how protective of her Kyo is
The fight was pretty entertaining
Run Haru! Run! - had to say that *blush*

~Myst

Things I liked:
Fantastic descriptions
I found out yesterday that you live in Hawaii so it's good that you write about things you know XD
Aww it's cute how they're working together ^-^

~Myst
Things that I didn't like
You switch tenses a lot
Pace is a little fast
"Kyo was working the cashier" - either as the cashier or working the cash register
*closes eyes in reader pain* Sorry but the eye thing was way way too reminiscent of Hatori

Things I liked:
Nice interactions
I like this new life you've set up for them
They're so cute together *squees* So ADORABLE!
Fantastic descriptions
Aww it's adorable how he's thinking about her

~Myst

Ello guvna! I think the name of the new volume should be, After the Fire. It's a song by an artist named Amy Grant. I think the title really applies to what happened here at the end of the story. Anyway, I loved this story, and I can't wait for the second seqeul. See ya!
Peace,
Nami