Reviews for The Strange Change of Veruca Salt

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skuldugger 2008-07-25 ch 10,	abuse"VERRUCA SALT-RICH BICH" "UGLY **" that so fecking funny (excuse my lang. but im Irish) update soon
baudelairestitch 2008-07-23 ch 9,	abuseEver since I read CatCF as a little kid, I always wondered what happened to the other kids (besides Charlie, that is) after the story ended. And so I found your story--I loved every moment of it and hope you will continue it. Veruca is so in-character the whole way, and I love Aunt Katharine. Oh, and you asked to point out any spelling mistakes... "apologize" has a z and not an s, "hippie" has an ie at the end, and I'm pretty sure in chapter eight it said "pleased" instead of "please." In chapter nine it said the teacher crosses off something instead of crossed. But it doesn't really matter... we all know what you meant. x3 I love it and can't wait to see how the fic turns out!
Yva J. 2008-07-23 ch 10,	abuseI am seriously starting to feel sorry for Veruca, talk about being the fish out of water at that school. Part of me thinks that she deserves what she gets, and another part of me thinks she doesn't because she has never lived with it. Her parents have spoiled her for so long that it is going to take some time for her to get used to not being spoiled. I am worried a bit about Dory. She seems to have something going on, and I think she may, in fact, hold the key to Veruca's changing. I hope that the change starts to happen soon, but I hope that Dory is OK, she's my favorite of your original characters. Some of these tricks seem almost too much like what I saw when I was in school...not fun at all, especially to be on the receiving end of them, which I was and I wasn't rich. ;) Keep at this, this story is very good. :) Glad to see you posting an update to it. Hope to read more very soon. ~Yva
dotdashscore 2008-07-14 ch 9,	abuseI just read this all the way through, its awesome. =3 As for the pairings, I may be a little late, but I think Mike/Veruca will be better/more realistic than Charlie/Veruca. Btw, how old is she in this one?
skuldugger 2008-07-01 ch 9,	abuseBrill. I love this story! keep at it! I like the way you made Verucas handwriting.I spotted one or two tiny mistakes but im not going to point them out because it will just ruin this review. So er.. keep at it! UPDATE! P.S Are you a fan of family guy? Because i just sent in my 2nd fanfic so cn R&R it plz?
Yva J. 2008-06-30 ch 9,	abuseIt's going well, I liked how you emphasized Veruca's grammar issue, although I would think that a girl who was rich, snobby, and uncouth would actually have better grammar than that, but that's just me. Of course, being a rich brat she could always afford to let people write letters for her. As far as troubled spots, I didn't really catch anything, but I will keep my eyes pealed for anything resembling a typo. ;) Keep going, I'm glad that you mentioned the Golden Ticket because it seems natural for that topic to come up. Of course, it would have been funny if you mentioned the verruca wart. Talk about your flashbacks to something not so pleasant. Hehe. Keep going, this is really good. :) I wonder what will happen with Danni. That should get interesting. ~Yva
Nightcrawlerlover 2008-06-30 ch 9,	abuseBrilliant! Seems like Veruca's found a rival. I don't think Dannii and Dory are Mary Sues; I think they are the OCs that have flaws, like people in real life. Keep up your phenomenal writing!
YA-YA 2008-06-30 ch 9, anon.	abuseHaha- "Veruca has behaviour issues." Gee, ya think? :D Talk about an understatement! Good going. This story must be good, 'cause I'm still reading it!
YA-YA 2008-06-25 ch 8, anon.	abuseThis is such an entertaining story, and easy to follow! I was reminded of something that happened a few years ago: I was on a city bus with a friend of mine, and suddenly an elderly lady gets up and asks the driver to let her off. But he's in the middle lane, and not near a stop. That just made her mad. She stomped her foot and said, "But I want off NOW!" My friend and I both agreed she had to be Veruca Salt, all grown up. We joked about that for a long time after... So let's see how Veruca handles school, shall we?
Nightcrawlerlover 2008-06-24 ch 8,	abuseThat night, Veruca went to her bedroom. She had been sent up after losing her temper with Ollie, and emptying her plate of peas over his head. She threw herself onto her bed, fuming with rage. Something crackled beneath her, on her duvet – something made of paper. Curiously, she felt under her back and found something. It was a magazine. Entitled Mizz, it was bright and glossy and cheerful-looking. A smiling actress Veruca vaguely recognized stared out from the front cover. Veruca flipped it open. It smelled new and earthy. The first page was full of celebrity gossip. Veruca, being part of the British upper class, was familiar with the gossip of magazines and newspapers. This so-called ‘news’ was very second-rate, with poor grammar. It was easy to tell most of it wasn’t real. And yet it was so absorbing. Veruca turned over, spreading the magazine on her pillow. Propping herself up on her elbows in order to be more comfortable, she flipped the page. A piece of paper fluttered from the magazine to the floor. Veruca scooped it up and held it close to her face, scanning the scribbled Biro text. Veruca, the note said, I thought you might appreciate this. Be prepared. Aunt K. Be prepared? Veruca thought, idly screwing the note into a ball and flicking it at the floor. For what? “Veruca, pleased don’t start" should be "Veruca, please don't start" - just to give you a heads up. And as for why every chapter title is printed twice, I don't know. (But if you need a beta reader for checking typos and things, I'd be glad to help!) Anyway, keep up your lovely writing!
I Follwed The White Rabbit 2008-06-24 ch 8,	abuseYAY! I saw your chapters 7 & 8 come up a while ago, but I just havn't had the time to check them out. Your chapters are getting better as they progress. Your description of Tesco reminds me of Winco a mile or so away from me.
skuldugger 2008-06-24 ch 8,	abuseTESCO? This story keeps getting beter by the minute! P.S Tanks for reveiwing my story.
Kore-of-Myth 2008-06-24 ch 8,	abuseI'm enjoying this fic and the characterizations involved. The double first line is easily deleted from the 'edit' center on the Documents page. I tend to write my A/N's there, and delete it at the same time. Hope this helps! Keep Writing!
Yva J. 2008-06-24 ch 8,	abuseWhen you upload your files, go to 'edit' and then you can edit out the top line. The new editor does that, and it drives me bonkers, but that should help with the editing issue. If you don't understand what I mean, just send a PM. :) Your portrayal of Veruca is so spot on, I could see all these things happening and it just makes me laugh. 'Only hippies recycle', I love it! My nickname in school was 'flower child'. hahaha. That was great. I am so impressed, and yes I remember Tesco when I went to London. You evoked a great deal of memories for me with this one. Keep at it, this is really good! Bravo. ~Yva
skuldugger 2008-06-20 ch 7,	abuseARGh Where's Aunt Kathrine going to take veruca?! I must know! can you read and reveiw my story?

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