This story is awesome. Your phasing is excellent, the plot is highly enjoyable, and your characterization is true-to-life. I particularly liked your take on Jiraya. He is representative of the trope Pervert With A Heart Of Gold.

hahahah the ending was hilarious!

One thing I wish to comment on. Naruto still have the 5 elemental seal on him. Not sure if you forgot that or not. Otherwise I am looking forward to the next chapter.

This has great potential. I love it.

I felt this story was well written and probably has many possible only problem I have is the amount of time it takes to wait for the next chapter because it is one of those stories you just immerse yourself in and the spelling errors.I feel that this story probably could use a less intelligent approach-I believe younger(or dumber) readers won't understand the writing style and won't be familiar with many words. -TRULY ADDICTIVE

Is someone ever gonna do something about that seal that Oro-theme put on Naruto? He knows about it after all... just wondering...

Love it.

now this is a great fic, too bad you stop writing it.
to bad i'm not a writer, if i was i would continue it for you,.
please reconsider continuing this fic.
peace

Yo, I don't know if you'll ever read this or let alone you are even on FF, but I just thought I'd let you know now...I really liked this story!

You write so well, I was immediately drawn in and captivated by your writing style...the amount of thought, detail, and how in character people were was absolutely amazing!

I read this some years ago, before I had an account...heh heh didn't know it was free at the time...but as soon as I began reading the first chapter I was flabbergasted, to say the least...

I'm sure you get this all the time but your writing is simply put AMAZING, as I mentioned above...as you can tell by my name I am a reader, sometimes I get lost in time reading on FF...one time I hadn't even noticed about 7 hours passed while I was reading, funny huh?

Anyways, when I had found out the story hadn't been updated in awhile, I was...well...sad, it pains me to see such great pieces of literature go, even worse when a talented author drops off the earth...

But then again I don't know what may have happened in your life, so I'm not gonna drill you for more chapters or anything like that, because YOU are the author and have final say in what happens, I just want you to know should you ever begin to write on this masterpiece again, I'll definitely read it...

Take care of yourself, I hope everything is well with you, and most of all...keep on doing what you do best :)

- R.N.A.W. Reader Not A Writer

any chance you can put this up for adoption on the forums?
It would be awesome to see this continued.

Pimp chapter.

I love chapter 3. For once in a story, the writer doesn't bullshit around about Sakura and knocks some semblance of reality in her deluded empty head, via an opponent. Every other attempt written has been empty words and occationally Sakura gets an ego boost with some instant super illusions or is set aside until having her canon version's skillless form with super strength to get around failing all other aspects...Honestly, when in on such a negative level, you can't simply build them up. You need to break the arrogence by having them fall first and so take the initiative to improve. Sakura may have some initial potential, but is rather one-dimensiona for at least the first half of the show and has few redeeming personality traits, those being overwritten by the negative aspects of said personality. Hm, I think I rambled a bit. Anyway, onward I read.

Oh, Jiraiya. You're a fucking idiot, Pervy-sage.

I like this story. I want to know what happens next. Please don't abandon this.

Fascinating.