Hey... I feel like this story has the potential to be something rather great... I know it's been a long time since you wrote it but... maybe you could explore the journey that Trunks undergos to gain Pan's heart back and show her that he does care? Idk... just a suggestion. Oh and btw... reading this kind of made me want to pick up where I left of concerning my own story!

perfect example on how the truth hurts. good story. i like the way you right btw i wrote my first fan fic and its dbz id appreciate if you had reviewed thank you

We this was a downer. After 5 weeks in israel, here i am, looking for great romance stories and a get a downing break up fic. HE DIDN'T EVEN FIGHT FOR HER!! Oh well. Writing is great, as always, and i hope to read more from you soon. (hopefully with a happy ending?)

PLEASE CONTINUE THIS! It's soo awesome! If you continue it please let me know! Awesome job!
-OitF

This was pretty good, even if this was a break up fic..which makes me oh so sad. Very good job with the writing, and I would welcome a follow up if you decide to write one. Just let me know if you do, I'm dying to know whats going to happen next. Great job.
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you did say if enough people yell at you, right?
WELL MAKE THEM WORK THINGS OUT!
love the sotry

You need to change up the formatting a bit- Its hard to read when everything is in big paragraphs and it makes things abit confusing. I all most lost interest because of your formatting. I like where the story is going- but jeez... you some spacing for readers sake

Cute read, you have got some potential. Will keep a lookout for more of your stuff. Personally, I'm not a trunks/pan fan but hey that's just me.