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brigrove
2009-11-12 . chapter 12
Interesting story - though it would have been better with his parents finding out who he was at the end BEFORE he disappeared
brigrove
2009-11-11 . chapter 5
... when you graduate... Should be ... when you leave school. There's no such thing as an all or nothing graduation in British schools and Hogwarts system is based on the English system - they get OWL (and presumably NEWT) results in the middle of the summer holidays, so graduation would be impossible anyway as they wouldn't know if they've passed anything.
MrsHellman
2009-11-02 . chapter 13
Hello Worfe,

Okay, I finally got the time to read this story -bangs head against screen- I’ve been so busy with finals, test, homework, work, my own stories, betaing, the Naruto fandom and life in general that I’ve barely had time to do anything fun , but . . . well . . . I’ve been writing on my own fictions of course – as I mentioned – because they’ve been my top priority, hehe xD Anyway! I’m here to leave a review, so that’s what you’re going to get! I hope you like short reviews; don’t know though -_-“ I'm not that good with long reviews, I usually leave long reviews when I find an interesting story, and you'll realise if this is a good story thanks to my review (from my opinion though xP)

There was a lot of things I likes in this story, and I ADORE the fact that it’s about Lily and James as well as Harry and Sirius, I love those characters, and my new obsession is Harry Potter fanfics with Harry’s parents alive. It’s so freaking sad that he doesn’t have his parents in the cannon story, it makes me tear eyed . . . TT_TT Well, well . . . ignore my whining, I’ve got some things to tell you.

First off: I loved reading this story! x3 It contained friendship, romance, love, family and the long, hard, sweaty, painful, opposite-to-enjoyable way for a great relationship story xD I’m a weird person, but I simply loved this story! I’ve got to say that I actually have some critique (I love critique, really, because that means that the readers are taking their time reading my story, and then think about it before reviewing :3) to give you, good, bad and constructive, hmm?? So prepare yourself :3 At least I’m giving you a warning, huh?? xD I’ve got a lot of things to say though and I want you to know that nothing is meant to be felonious ;P Sometimes, I ramble and then all of a sudden, there’s this little sentence that’s not supposed to be there you know . . .-_-“

The beginning of the story was great, with Binns’ lesson and all that, it wasn’t time travel BOOM! and it’s all running, you had an introduction, and it was extremely well-written, which remind me; you’re simply awesome with grammar, spelling, capitalization, details, descriptions, emotions, keeping the characters quite IC, realistic writing and to keep a good length of the chapters as well as for the story itself :D I tend to write too much when writing a story, but when I read this, I realised that I write too little :S

But I’ve got to tell you about the things I didn’t like as much either . . . the Voldemort incident was interesting, but at the same time kind of lame and unrealistic – don’t get me wrong, I love the story – but this one incident made me tilt my head and arch a brow. I like to see fights between Voldemort and Harry but it also depends on how well written they are. In this case, the scene and all that were great, but at the wrong time, the wrong place and just . . . well . . . it was wrong. How did Voldemort get into Hogsmeade, that’s one question, and then another one; what the hell was actually going on? O.o Death Eaters right and left, voila! And there you’ve got Aurors, and then there’s Harry . . . wow . . . anyway! I think ti was the only thing I was a bit sceptic about :]

Now . . . what else to tell you, well, the constructive criticism is left! xP It was a great story in general, but you noticed, from time to time, that things were stressed. This happened during ten days in eleven chapters, and everything happened so fast. It’s an art to be able and write a story at a good pace, I tend to write too fast, so yeah . . . I can’t give you personal advice on how to make things better, sorry -_-“

I DID LIKE ANOTHER THING THOUGH! xD Harry not interrupting the relationship between Lily and James! Well, he kind of did, but he wasn’t the one that made them end up together, he was just there and was a moral support for James :]

All in all, I loved the story, and I’d like to see more from you, thank you for a wonderful story! :D -runs off to read more story where James and Lily are alive and about-

Huggles,
Mi
count revan
2009-10-29 . chapter 13
Simply awesome!
cj
2009-10-24 . chapter 1
Really good story, even reading it a second time around! I just have one criticism and that would be question marks. You don't have many of them and you need them. If a person asks a question there needs to be a question mark at the end because that person is not making a statement. If he is making a statement, sometimes a question mark is (usually) still needed depending on the particular statement and context but it can be followed with a description to show that it's a statement and not a description though. That was my only annoyance as far as I remember!! Great Job!
Allycatdq911
2009-10-23 . chapter 12
:) I'm so sad it's over! A few things I previously forgot to comment on... I really liked the idea of the time sand, unless I've been hiding under a rock I'm pretty sure that's really original, nice job on that. Also... I didn't get the... what was her name? Horace or something. That chick that kept hitting on Harry, who was that? Can you please PM me the answer? I reviewed all of the story.. thanks :)
Allycatdq911
2009-10-22 . chapter 11
I'm so glad you decided to continue and write enough chapter. I can't wait to have Harry tell his friends where he's been! Ta-ta, I'm off to read another fantastic chapter! ;)
Allycatdq911
2009-10-22 . chapter 10
Wow this is really...blah blah, you've heard it a zillion times. I AM looking forward to reading just who Sirius shot while under the Imperious curse though. Keep it up!
Allycatdq911
2009-10-20 . chapter 8
Once again, A+ Your chapters are really long... I'm glad though. You did a very spectacular job describing the battle between Harry and Professor Barten.
Allycatdq911
2009-10-19 . chapter 7
I'm so glad that Sirius finally spilled about his problems! Lol, I think I'm getting a little too caught up with this story...
Allycatdq911
2009-10-19 . chapter 6
I LOVED this chapter! You should consider writing your own book. But I did think it was a little weird that only a few people noticed Harry's dive...
Allycatdq911
2009-10-19 . chapter 5
I really like your story, and I promise to continue to write in complete sentences. ;) I can't wait to read about Sirius Black and the Professor. :D Keep it up!
lipasnape
2009-10-19 . chapter 12
You are doing just fine on your own. This is a very good story. Thank you very much.
lipasnape
2009-10-19 . chapter 11
Very interesting story. I like the idea very much (sorry not to have more details about other time periods others went to), but the dynamics in 1976 was especially well thought out and written.
Allycatdq911
2009-10-19 . chapter 4
Wow I can't wait to see what happens next! I really like how you portrayed Peter. That was really unique, most stories end up leaving him out of things a lot, like he'll leave to go to the bathroom and come back seven chapters later, and then forget something in the common room, etc. Lol, love the story!
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