This is really good for a first story! Not only was it grammar mistake-free (hehe), I was actually good and I enjoyed reading it...so...keep up the good work!

This was fun to read, especially the end. If you get the time, a sequel would be nice!

That would be so cool if you would write a sequel! Could you PM me when you've posted it on here? I know you said you didn't know when you'd get the time to write it, but when you do ..

Oh, this is a great way to end the date! A follow-up must be done!

That was nice. I'm not sure the second half matched the first half so well, although it probably would have if it had been longer. It just seems a little like it is two plots folded into one- the bowling invitation and the massive realisations of their general blindness to one another. Personally I liked the first half better, but the second bit wasn't bad, just a bit rushed and sort of tacked on. You know what, I figured it out. It's that the end bit is sort of generic, it could fit on the end of hundreds of different stories and therefore doesn't seem to mesh quite right with the first bit.
I did really like the first bit though.

Aw that was cute! lol loved it!

I just have one question...what does this mean?
"I think I was extremely you though,”
I must have missed something...did you forget a word? Or am i just retarded? lol

That was really sweet. I'd love to see a sequel with Brennan, Booth, and Parker at the bowling "rink." Great job!

aw that was a sweet ending to the bowling night:) i liked when he got excited about taking Parker and her bowling.