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| diva.divine 2008-07-25 ch 3,  | abusewow. that is all i have to say. you NAILED edmund! |
| whennerdscollide 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseMan, if David had gone to his mother's house I would have **. The nerve of modern men! haha |
| Miniver 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseMaybe you can guess what my favorite line was. It was when Edmund said to his mother that he could stay behind and get a job, too. He may not know how to express love, but he certainly feels it. You can see how a kid like this could become a Narnian King. I like that Helen is in the forefront of this story, and you convey the time and place very effectively. I'm curious to see how far you carry the story. |
| xSlytherclaWx 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseBrilliant! Edmund's always been my favorite character and you characterized him so well! |
| claire henry 2008-07-17 ch 3, anon. | abusethat was a wonderful idea on how Edmund was brought into the world, and a big thanks for rooty-booty for your characterization of Edmund and David(p.s. love the name,so 1940's. I can't wait to read about Lucy. I bet her will be adoreable. please update soon. |
| Selene Antilles 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseOh. I don't even know where to begin. It's lovely and adorable! It's so rare to get the kids really acting like kids and with Helen too! I think my favorite chapter is Susan's - it's somehow fitting that she came out of the greatest romance. Can't wait for Lucy! |
| lickitysplit 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseI really love slice-of-life pieces, and yours is beautifully written and very original. The minimal style contributes more to the story than one that would go on for pages and pages. Looking forward to the next installment. |
| Lirenel 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseGood chapter! I thought you wrote Edmund very well: You didn't make him just completely a brat, but a brat with underlying tenderness and feeling. Good job! |
| acacia59601 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseGreat chapter, and I can see Ed always having been prickly... Very good job! |
| Politics.and.Prose 2008-07-17 ch 3, | abuseFirst, let me just vent in saying that this site logs you out at the oddest times. Anyway, GREAT chapter. I loved it. And I felt SO bad for the babies. :( Can't wait to read about Lu. |
| breebree33 2008-07-02 ch 2, anon. | abuseAw, I've been reading your other fic, All the Dreams... and I just want to say that this is adorable and sweet and I love it dearly. |
| secretcastle 2008-06-19 ch 2, | abuseGrandma Pevensie here strikes me as somebody that reads Emily Post and lives by it to the last letter. Very stiff indeed and I think I can understand how Helen feels around her. I suppose that quite influenced Susan's personality as well--very proper on the outside but secretive. I love how you managed to see through those situations and relate them to the four Pevensie's personalities. Now I'm really wondering how Ed was conceived. Update soon. |
| secretcastle 2008-06-19 ch 1, | abuseThis is truly unique. It's just the first chapter and you've won me over. So I suppose you're doing all four of them. I'm off to read the next chappie and I'll drop a line from there. |
| Melantha A. 2008-06-07 ch 2, | abuseThis is fascinating. I can't wait to see Edmund's, that should be interesting. |
| Rosa Cotton 2008-05-28 ch 2, | abuseThat was simply lovely! I enjoyed you showing Susan's first brush with romance. And you wrote Helen wonderfully. I felt for her so much at the Christmas gathering. Wonderful job done! |