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Reviews for: Unexpected Revelation
Jellotube
2009-08-17 . chapter 1
Great great story
LeumasAlledrag
2009-04-17 . chapter 1
wow man i got to say you are great this was what i pictured the end to be instead of it going black but you brought it to life and made it completely full of heart and compelling excellence i got two words to say and that is "** awesome!"
Ali7.1
2008-07-20 . chapter 1
umm, you took the "dead" ending ok cool, not what we all want but then leaves room for other stories.

regardless, very well crafted the writing flowed nicely, thats important!

would love to read more from this author!!
Digiboy-Stew
2008-06-03 . chapter 1
I could easily see A.J. exacting vengeance in such a manner. It's always been obvious that he's had anger issues, and after Tony got shot by Uncle Jr. it was made clear that underneath all the teenage superficiality A.J. really did care for his dad. Nice to see him finally prove himself and earn his role in the family.
Electrode
2008-05-31 . chapter 1
To be brutally honest, it's quite unrealistic. Families don't get touched in the mafia. They wouldn't shoot Carmella and Meadow, because the contract wasn't out for them. Also, what about everyone else in the restaurant?

However, I can't say that it's all bad. You're obviously a good writer, and the start was fantastic. So sorry to be such a critic...
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