Very good! Maybe write a sequel? XD

i honestly thought the only reason this story was M rated was for the language. where's the hot spicy stuff? D:< lawl

great job anyway =)

holy shit. I've never read these two though I've kind of weirdly always like Grimmjaw...but my point is: it worked. It was dark and bitter and bloody and the emotions (or the hollow-version of emotions) were definitely there. I honestly have so much going on in my head right now and can say so much but I don't think I'd be able to articulate it properly.

That line about El Forte really got to me though and the whole thing with phantom pains...oh there are so many kinds!
overall, thanks for this. before my rant becomes nonsense, just want to say that it was very well-written on both the surface and psychological levels

"one too many Aizen/Ulquiorra fics"
YOU LIE!
I CANT FIND ANY!
Give!
XD

also
I liked it =]

Wow, this is wicked good.

Maybe Aizen brought those with him when he came. But they’re Grimmjaw’s now.
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I love this, the cross internal struggle between hollow and shinigami doesn't get enough attention. The arrancar aren't hollows anymore than Ichigo is a shinigami.

Grimmjaw's testosterone-fueled voice is really well done. I can feel his frustration as he "prowls" through the halls. He wants to bash up someone but the only guy he can get away with disturbing is too apathetic to care. I don't really know bleach that well, so I'm not sure if my comments would be appropriate, but anyways...here's my impression:

I liked hearing Grimmjaw's thoughts in each paragraph, but because there aren't clear images/scenes being detailed, I can't really "see" what is happening until Ulquiorra steps out of Aizen's room and their confrontation starts. That kinda makes it more difficult for me to get hooked for the first half of the story...but I'm just speaking from the POV of someone not familiar with the Espada Arc. That may be why I find the ending when Grimmjaw admits how he lost his pride to Ulquiorra touching but not a knockout. Grimmjaw may want Ulquiorra, even desperate to pounce on him, but that isn't made very vivid, doesn't really rise above his general resentment for his many enemies, so when he finally gets his main prize,it doesn't feel rewarding. Maybe because more sensual details like sounds, smells, colors or lighting are needed?

Like: " He wants to break this damned son of a bitch who’s looked down on him for the entirety of his existence, finally rip apart that composure, make his own marks." This is a very intense thought, but would be much more intense if you could spend some time describing how impassive Ulquiorra's face is and how nice it would be all broken up, maybe describe some irritating gesture of politeness showing his distance and arrogance when Grimmjaw really wants him to return his punch? ( maybe some past situation where Ulquiorra denied his advances?)

I liked the part when the two sit on the bed together, like old friends, and Ulquiorra putting on two coats to try to look neat,lol.

Anyways, just my general impression and also again my impressions could be different from other people familiar with Grimmjaw.

Thanks for the fic!

Really well written. I enjoyed reading it.

- The Book of Counted Sorrows

All I can say is... awesome! ^^ Usually I don't review, but since no one reviewed this great fic D: You get a review from me :D You portrayed the characters well, and I really liked the way you wrote about the "phantom pain." Hope you write more! ^^