I read all four chapters and they were awesome! Pleaes update soon. I can't wait to read the rest of them. This is so wicked! I wonder how the rest is going to play out.

i love it

Awesome story.

Awh. I love this chapter. This who story is good. update it soon i like it a lot. ^_^

So now we're at the Son house. Should prove interesting. That Ryuo or however you spell his name is making me curious. Is he gonna keep popping up in the story? Guess I'll see soon.

As far as I could see, you had some misspelled words, and a few missing ones. "We already did research on them and there mother is quite skilled in Martial Arts..." the 'there' should be 'their.'
"This time she was the one who was out off." This needs the 'out' to be 'cut.'
"With her head low, she spun around and rushed toward the door that lead to her escape." 'Lead' needs to be 'led.'
"A face she thought she'd never ever had to see again, but she seemed to be died wrong." 'Died' should be 'dead.'
"Maybe this be so bad after all." Needs 'wouldn't' between 'this' and 'be.'
I think there were a couple others but other than that, no glaring mistakes. Keep up the good work.

Never mess with Goten or he'll own you with flying cookies! Hahaha. Who needs Gohan to protect you when cookies are deadlier. I can't believe this chapter ended so soon...I just got comfortable. Bummer. I am so ready for the next chapter. Update soon or I'll send Goten and his cookies after you! haha.

Pretty cool. Please update soon.

update its a good story

Interesting. Update soon you got me hooked.

And if it isn't my favorite little author with another good chapter. I see the pace is picking up a bit. Makes me wonder what Hercule wanted to say. Hm...

What I'm going to say here is something that was pounded into my head for...uhh, a very long time. You use 'there' alot but sometimes you're using the wrong one. "There" is used to point out places and ideas. The 'there' for people and ownership is "Their." Why we have to have all kinds of spelling for the same word is beyond me but there it is.

Keep up the good work.

Cool chapter. Please update soon.

Nice chapter. Definitely a good way to start my day. Though, you had some grammar mistakes though. One being David "imitated" Videl. I think you meant intimidated. If you want, I can beta for you if you wish. The more you write, the better you'll get.

Good chapter, keep up the good work. Hope to see more soon.

Great chapter. Please update soon.

I must say, that this was pretty good for a first chapter... this also helped me realize that half the DBZ cast are named after practical things and food. Makes me laugh. Overall I did like this chapter and I hope you write more.

P.S.
Try not to procrastinate as much as you usually do =P