Well, I think this is pretty good. In fact...you've given me a new story idea that's just popped into my head and won't leave. Hmm. Anyway, it's a good start, so update soon!

Without knowing much about the story, I found that I was engaged in it, and was left wanting to know more.

OHOHOHIH First reviewer! hhahhahahaha yay's I'm so happy I could help. ^^ great chappie. But just as some (more) constructive criticism, I think the settings themselves are being rather neglected. T.T poor settings. You do great with character developement, but I think you put too much effort into just your peeps. A story is not made of characters alone. ^^