well, judging from the reviews the story is godly so i will read on... ill tell you what i think in a bit

i stoped during the middile of the second chapter... i mean like 20min. after sonic suposedly died tails and amy are inlove gazing at the sun set maybe its better later on im going to look at the reviews and judge if it deserves a second chance...

All in all, fairly decent effort at a TailsxAmy pairing, im one of the few fans of the pairing and its nice to see someone make the effort to write for it.

I only have a couple of beefs with it, the spelling at points leaves a little to be desired and of course there is the occasional "missing word syndrome" I know of it because I suffer for it myself in my own writing.

I felt that the story was a little rushed at the start...I mean it's like "Oh no Sonic's Dead!" to "I love you Amy" in the space of about 5 minutes. For someone who has supposedly had a huge impact on their lives, he got forgotten about fairly quick. The story in retrospect is kind of like a poodle, fluffy when it doesn't have to be, It would have been a lot better to focus a little more on the plot than on the mushy mushy between Tails and Amy.

Now slating aside there were a couple of things I really liked in this, most notably was the additon of Sonic as Tails' conscience, I thought that was pretty well done and an original take on a dead character. The addition of Fiona as well was a pretty good choice, as a reader of the comics, we all know how cool a match she would be for a slightly older Tails so it was an original decision and one I commend you for.

You dont have to take my criticisms on board but I say what I see, no one's work is perfect. Mine is far from it too and I just like to share my knowledge and experience with fellow fiction writers who share the less popular pairing trends like I do for most things i write for.

Peace Out

Riptos-C-

I can get why Sonikka cried at the ending! She was the reason why I found out about this story and I'm glad I got the chance to read it. It was short but an awesome story, you had some grammatical errors but everything else was ok. You didn't have too much details but just enough to get the picture in my head. I think you also did a good job on making me feel the characters feelings. I dunno if you already made the sequel to this story but be sure I'll read it! And continue making fanfics. ;)

There is probably always some dialogue that makes me laugh a bit! It seems that Sonic is trying to tell Tails what's going on!(doy did you just realize that?) It seems like that he's trying to actually keep Tails and Amy together. But Sonic is very kind- hearted afterall. He'd want what makes his girlfriend happy right? Knuckles is a bit serious about the whole "Tails probably killed Sonic" thing. He'd actually try to break the two up. If I were him I'd try to go more on the "investigate what really happened" side. Even though Tails actually didnt do anything. Oh and one more thing... Oh, Tails said a bad word! Jk. =P

I had a feeling it was Fiona! (but my first guess was a fan character) Man does Tails forget things. I'd think he would be loyal to Sonic and feel a lot more upset about his death.(and Amy too, but she already showed how sad she was a while back.) But it is Fiona, and he did have a crush on her. You trick me just like Tails tricked Amy, I really thought he was sick. Lol. I think I easily believe things...

Ok, maybe I just have a weird sense of humour or you whatever dialogue you wrote was intensionally(sp?) funny! I keep smiling and sometimes laugh a little throughout the story! I think you do a good job at keeping me interested. Hmm...I think I've figured out Knuckles' little plan...

"What happened to her?" Knuckles asked. Then, his pigheadedness jumped into the scene. "Wait...something's up with Sonic, isn't it! Did he break up with her already for someone else? I swear I'll throw him off a cliff!" Haha! Now that made me laugh!XD It was really far from what really happened. Other than that, I actually felt sad when the two of them heard a loud yell from inside... I wonder what's gonna happen next. The plot of the story is not quite clear for me, but I believe that's a good thing! That means you can surprise people a lot more than when someone knows what's gonna happen. ^_^

This chapter surprised me a lot! First I believe Sonic is alive and trying to kill Tails but it's just his dream.(more like a nightmare...) and then suddenly Tails is (I think) done making breakfast and suddenly Sonic speaks to Tails telling him he's starving! O.o Kinda scared me a bit. Your good at tricking me. =P

When Tails' conscience spoke it made me laugh a most of the time. (always reminding Tails of his mistakes.=P) I can't believe Amy and Tails forgot about Sonic that fast! (sorry this review was basically useless. I'm not an expert at making reviews and I dont have much to say.)

I think this was a great starting chapter; had a mix of action and some romance! I think you caught their personalities well also. =) The chapter also had enough details for me to picture what was going on. I can't believe Sonic died in the first chapter! Hopefully they find his body but I doubt that...

HOW CUTE!

you know this story is up in Sonikkas profile. Well, not like story type but in the profile... she said it was nice so i came and read it, it was pretty nice to see TAils takes Sonics place now. Its very nice and i hope you continue a sequel

Sonic? OMG!! what's going on! i shall read on!!

huh? wow. wait. what happened to sonic! they forgot about him like that!! and where did that egghead go!unanswered questions which is why im reading on!! =]