Reviews for Black Dwarfs, Blue River

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MarbleGlove 2008-08-16 ch 30,	abuseThis is an awesome story. I love it. Thanks for sharing.
Andi Horton 2008-08-04 ch 30,	abuseThe first thing that struck me was the markedly different tone between Brickit's first letter to the Four and his most recent letter to Edmund! Yet he hasn't changed a bit from start to finish, it's simply the place Edmund has found within his family rather than being the interloper from without that brings about the altered tone, and I do love how those two letters seem to so perfectly bookend the development of this story. Narnians more excited about First Mail Ever than about party = priceless. Comic excellence. I love it. The initial reactions to Peter's appearance were perfectly in character and Boont's little jab brought out a real grin! The reaction to Lucy and Susan also made me smile, but it was Edmund's ability to play the well-beloved "you never asked" card that got a real giggle out of me :P The little slip-up on Lucy's part about the letter was . . . well I suppose it was ill-timed on her part but by then I was already chuckling so it was easy to go right into full blown laughter, and I was pretty much done for from then on! The final moment between the brothers was so achingly sweet and tender, it's just as well that everything that led up to it was simple merriment. Lovely, lovely work, a genuine treasure of a story, a delight to read and a tragedy to finally have to finish it!
Andi Horton 2008-08-04 ch 29,	abuseLeaving home and coming home all in one fell swoop! This chapter was, thankfully, much heavier on the "sweet" than on the "bitter" which is not what I had been bracing myself to expect. Edmund's easy (well, almost easy. Poor Peter is going to be breathing through his mouth for a while, I expect!) transferral from one family to the next was more warming to read of than it was heartbreaking, so that was something of a relief! Also beautiful was Brickit's stout defence of Edmund. Most often it seems that we only see the aftermath of such a disagreement, through Edmund's eyes, so to see it finally laid out in the open this was was especially heartwarming. Brickit's combined love of Edmund and unconcealed dislike of his cousins' attitudes make his response to their onslaught both endearing and amusing, somehow, as if we're never quite sure which sentiment is motivating him to speak at any one time. Finally, the scene you paint of the reunion is just beautiful. The warmth that envelops Edmund as he returns to everyone is a tangible reminder of the warmth he left behind, and the subtle differences between the two sorts of family only serve to compliment each other and place emphasis on Edmund's being the common bond they share.
Andi Horton 2008-08-04 ch 28,	abuseIt feels somehow inadequate that as heartaching as that story was, all I can think of now is how Brickit will feel when Edmund, too, disappears. I like that the tenderness (if it can be called that!) in Brickit manifests in this way, in a way that causes Edmund more anxiety and anxious regret than just plain discomfort, the way I suspect it would have been if Brickit had confided in him himself. The way they choose to resolve the matter also seems very in keeping with the two of them and their respective characters. Very well-drawn chap.
Andi Horton 2008-08-04 ch 27,	abuseFood, and drink and . . . oh, poor Edmund, the song! I think possibly what I loved best about the authors of my childhood was the way they wrote about FOOD! This chapter brought it all rushing back with mouthwatering clarity, and the slightly sour note(!) with the bad wine somehow made the rest of it seem that much more real and all the more appetising. The flow of the party is also well-drawn, the connections Edmund makes with Beal's daughters striking a particularly resonant chord. The way you write the whole scene lends to the general feel of a celebration, at least in my reading of it; I can feel the closeness of the crowd, in every respect, and the bustle and gaiety of it all that gradually dies way to the quieter clarity of the music. Edmund's confused, blundering exit may not have been graceful ("perfectly painful" would probably describe it best) but it was also wholly believable. Excellent, as always :)
Andi Horton 2008-08-04 ch 26,	abuseAn unexpected and very well-contrived complication! The way you set this up was masterful, and the connections Edmund has forged between so many of the masters in his short time with the clan were clearly-depicted and poignant. I got very choked up when it came Beal's turn to speak, and the fierce, unanimous defence of Edmund's work against the bias of Barret was so unmistakably the union of family defending their own it did actually make me cry. That Peter is receiving from his brother's hand something that was fashioned by his brother's family is just . . . there's something so sure and right about it that I get, bizarrely, somehow a little homesick to think of it (and I am sitting right in my own home office!) In an already wonderfully-crafted story this chapter truly stands out as a showcase for everything that has gone before it. Exquisite work, as usual.
Andi Horton 2008-08-04 ch 25,	abuseI can't wait to catch up on this fic, I've missed it so much! I love Edmund's awe. The way he's drawn into not only the metalwork of the craft but the way he valiantly tries his hand at a bit of everything . . . it's sweet of him, and somehow also incredibly, impressively adult (much more adult than many adults are, actually!) of him. The usual joking, barbs and camraderie are still there, of course, and work beautifully to balance the solemnity of the finished blade. That Edmund can see the thing with new eyes once the handle is on also seems significant-- that he hadn't been able to really acknowledge that it was incomplete until it was that much closer to being finished seems a suitable characterisation, somehow, though I can't quite put my finger on why. Off to read the next chapter!
JezRoll 2008-08-03 ch 30,	abusesigha beautiful piece, deary!! I am both elated to read the final chapter and saddened to see it over! Hope to see some more from you soon! ~Jez
laily7420 2008-08-03 ch 30,	abusei didn't want to read this story at first, then i got bored. so i read a few chapters and couldn't stop.i've saved the softcopy of this story in my pc. electrum,you have a real gift.the way you tell the story is so fantastic i hope u'll consider to write a book. anyway,pls dont stop writing about edmund, or peter, or susan or lucy.
elfrowen 2008-08-01 ch 30, anon.	abuseThis story is a marvel, an amazment, and a beauty. You managed to breath such life into your creations that I feel as if I was the one working at the smithy for three weeks, not Edmand. Not one word of this story needs to be changed, as it is as perfect as if it was written by Lewis himself. I will also be stealing "La." for my own stories.
diff-r-ent-1 2008-07-26 ch 30,	abusethis story was really great! i loved the fact that he wanted to keep edmund! ^_^ one of the best narnia stories if read so far.
storiewriter 2008-07-26 ch 30, anon.	abuseVery good job. I really don't read Narnia fanfiction, but a regular cowriter of mine showed this to me, and, to be frank, I'm glad she did. Very rich, and my face now hurts from smiling and laughing breathlessly so much. An extremely enjoyable fic, I liked how Edmund changed slightly and (this is most definately what caught me in the first place when I looked at the summary) finding out why they called Peter 'King Nancy'. Good job revealling what Brickit offered each sibling in return for Edmund himself, it was most definately amusing. All in all, I enjoyed this. Good job, and...if I see more of this sort of content by you by chance, there is no doubt I'm reading it. Keep writing.
the kid from colorado 2008-07-24 ch 30,	abusebeaming Beautiful as always. Well, well done, Lady E!
the kid from colorado 2008-07-24 ch 29,	abuseHAHAHAHA. That was great! Your humor never ceases to amaze me. I think my favorite scene was the bit about the coffee. That'll teach the little bugger to suffer in silence. Silly noble boy.
the kid from colorado 2008-07-24 ch 28,	abuseOh, what a beautiful chapter! It was lovely, E, it really was. But I couldn't help but laugh when Brint said, "In his shop. Probably making another battleaxe. It's what he does when he's upset." Makes me giggle. : ) Absolutely wonderful.

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