this is pretty good i cant wait for chapter 6

are you going to finish it? I never thought solid had a kid!

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Woah wait... why in chapter 1 does she say he's a spy, but in chapter 3 he sells stuff?

omg. keep updating! this story is really good! i want to know what happened to sam, snake, sarah, and alex. o wow, that's a lot of names that start with an s. anyways, keep updating! i dont care if you have a cold or whatever, i want to know what happens! :)

Besides the first-person view and the spacing, minor things, I only have one thing to point out that I find irritating about this story: the fact that the kid know's Sam's a spy. If you ever play Splinter Cell: Double Agent on the PS2 and play the ship bonus map you'll know that his kid doesn't as he makes sure she can't see him and even goes so far as to lie to her and say he's an officer when talking to her through a large door (not face-to-face).

Besides that, keep it up man.

Keep writing new chapters it's pretty could go somewhere with this.

O me love it! I would love for you to continue the story even further, even though you already have new chapters in.

I say it again,

ME LOVE IT! :) :) :) hee hee lol

Not a huge fan on the whole first person view, but that is about it. Could be pretty interesting though.