Ouch, that was a nasty fall. XD Well I can't wait to read more! Update soon! XD

Great story you two have going. I don't mind the tense changes between sections where you two switch off writing. And unlike the other reviewers actually enjoy the banter.

Good story, well written. Some grammar nitpicks, but they've already been mentioned. But I do have to agree with the author banter, it really isn't needed and does take away from the story. Am looking forward to more.

Nice. The banter between the Torchwood characters was very good. Sounded just like them. Quite sexy too.

What I liked a lot less about this story is that it kept switching from past to present tense and back every time the paragraph's focus changed from a Torchwood character to Atton, and back. To a certain extent I can understand writing a scene in present tense when the rest of the story is in past tense (or vice versa) if that particular scene is set in a different time or a different location. But don't switch tenses the way a movie director would switch camera angles. Personally I don't care which, but a scene should be in either past tense or present tense throughout.

Another grammar gripe: don't use of as a substitute for have. 've may sound like of (as in: I could've learned better grammar), but that doesn't mean it can be replaced by it.

And one personal gripe: banter between the authors, characters and whoever this Dark is in the authors' notes is distracting from the story. I know I don't have to read it, but just seeing there is such sillyness at the top and bottom of the chapter takes a bit of the fun out of the story.

Good story, though, very entertaining.