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| mutated glow worm 2008-06-23 ch 4, | abusei really like this chapter, keep up the good work MGW |
| mutated glow worm 2008-06-19 ch 3, | abusei really like this! dude you have to continue this, i only watched the movie a few daqys ago and i loved it! |
| Speakfire 2008-04-25 ch 2, | abuseAnother good chapter. I was slightly confused at the shift from present to past (when Will first met Beth's family) but over all it's very well written. I like how you acknowledge that Will didn't lay the blame on Ben Wade for his father's death. A suggestion though, you say he's killed by 'Ben Wade's posse'. A posse in Western literature and movies is a group of people, usually deputized by the sheriff, to chase down a bad guy. As Ben Wade's men are the bad guys, they'd be better described as his 'gang'. |
| Speakfire 2008-04-23 ch 1, | abuseYour story has a good start, makes me very curious about what is to come. I hope you update quickly. |