Reviews for An Empty World

Reviews For: An Empty World

Violamom 2008-05-07 ch 1,	abuseOh this is so well done...I, too, am not a huge fan of present tense stories--you're right, they tend to come out sounding "artsy" and self-important. But this is a wonderful, poignant piece. (Basically just ditto what everyone else has said to date.) If I had been Peter, this is probably how I would have felt...but I love the fact that he doesn't just mope around whining. He deals with his feelings in a very mature and noble way, out of concern for his siblings and others around him. He comes across as very Magnificent indeed. Aslan would be pleased, I'm sure. Congrats!
Val Evenstar 2008-05-01 ch 1,	abuseThis is really pretty. I took a while to start to understand it - i was trying to figure out where/when it was, and didn't get it till the third paragraph - but once I'd read a little further I liked it very much. It's got a real aching feeling to it; you can really tell how and why he's missing Narnia. Good job with the present tense, too, not many people can pull that off.
Miniver 2008-04-23 ch 1,	abuseThis is very lovely. You really capture Peter's yearning for what he now considers his true self. I love the way you compare Peter's reasons for seeking solitude in Narnia and in England. I also love the following paragraph, where Narnia "has been reduced to a bright ball of happiness" inside Peter. Great description! It must be so hard for the Four to shrink back into what they were before they spent so many years growing and living to the fullest in Narnia. I have to admit, I wish Lewis had shown Aslan giving the kids some form of hope (and maybe an earthly assignment) at the end of the book, so that they could feel some continuity--and that's what I like to imagine has happened when I think of Narnia. I'm glad that your take on it has a glimmer of hope near the end.
samwise o'keefe 2008-04-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseThankyou for this. Whenever I read about Susan denying Narnia (The Last Battle), I find it difficult to square with the sheer number of years they spent ruling the country. I know it's meant to show that we always have choices (as a Christian it's whether to go on following Jesus or just let it all slide), and even after LWW they have to choose what to do with ythe experiences they've had. Only Scubb and Pole are shown changing their environment through what has happened to them.
Liby 2008-04-23 ch 1, anon.	abuseYou painted a wonderful picture there. Great start to a story. It could be a one shot but I'm interested to see where you take it. Liby

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