Wow...WOW! That was amazing...

This is my first time reading (and to be honest with you, even CONSIDERING) Mello/Sayu and what a terrific way to be introduced to a new pairing. Once more, wow.

How you describe Sayu's feelings fits PERFECTLY with her doomed, insane fate. Seriously. The perfect life being destroyed by something she regarded as beautiful: it fits so gloriously into the canon of the story. SO WELL!

The Mello chapter, too. VERY very good. I loved this, especially your writing style. (I like when it flows so perfectly. X3)

Beautiful job. I LOVED IT!

~ erbby of "erbby-kiwi1727"

honestly, i love your writting style.

this story was indeed very well written. A bit short but, all the same a good well written story.

oh god, how could i have ever overlooked this? mello, sayu, smut, and beautiful imagery, all rolled in one. you're such an enormously talented writer, and you paint such a vivid picture of their twisted union. seriously, this absolutely amazing, and going on my favorites RIGHT NOW.

A perfect piece. 10/10. Beautifully written with beliavable characters, in-depth characterization and plausible plotline.

Whoa, that was totally awesome! If there is such a thing as a perfect angst this is definatly in the top 5. Keep writing!

wow that was excellent

very well written

i love your style and the mood you set

you stayed true to the characters and portayed Mello perfectly

great job!

...oh my slowly bleeding heart.
That was positively the best story i have ever read on fan fiction. net...Your style of writing resembles poetry, it IS poetry. Ah, and it caresses the soul with numbing thoughts. I love it, to give reason where reason isn't given. Such a sin, isn't it? Hm, i would like it if you continued writing. Not to this story, as i think you have finished this two-piece. I could be mistaken, however...but yes, please continue to write like this...It was beauty undefined.
Absolutely breathtaking...

-Nyx

OMG, I NEVER THOUGHT OF MELLO/SAYU TILL YOU! *hugs*

Woaweewow... lots of religious imagery, eh? Very nice. Sayu as the Virgin... mhm mhm.

Another beautiful written and poetic chapter, I must say.

This was a very beautifully written piece. Although there was no dialogue, it felt like a page out of a novel. I must say that you have to be one of the few talented authors on .

Very intense and somewhat poetic. I liked it a lot!^_~

wow very well written! im impressed
x

DAYMN!

After reading that, it was the word I had to describe this. The flow of everything and the imagery you created is simply astonishing.

GOD ALMIGHTY HAS BLESSED YOU SERIOUSLY WITH THE POWER OF THE INK!
This is BEAUTIFUL, AWESOME, A MASTERPIECE DRENCHED IN DIGITAL INK!

"Mello bound her, the Virgin, with a dog collar halo across her neck; broken hymen of innocence lost, unholy lips opened in mute sacrilege."

"Sayu was always surpassed by her brother. Light Yagami, the beloved son (brother) of the family, the brilliant prodigy who would revolutionize the world." (revolutionize the world - are you by chance into Utena ^_^)

"Perhaps it was inescapable - Sayu should’ve known the course of things would ultimately lead to such terrible baser desires. During her course of living up to this momentous event, Sayu was a good girl. A hardworking girl who tried to uphold the morals her family instilled into her impressionable mind. She never drank, never smoked, never did drugs. After being raised by an essentially good family, it would’ve frightened Sayu on how easily she accepted the transactions forced upon her if she hadn’t numbed herself to chaotic reality."

These Lines (and basically the whole piece) prove that you are meant To be an Author!

I'M HONOURED AND BLESSED BY GOD ALMIGHTY TO HAVE READ YOUR WORK!