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Reviews For: I Want Much More Than This Provincial Life!

Isleen
2008-06-29
ch 2,
abuseI really like it so far! I really like how you've developed Alex. Most characters that rebel against their parents are ungrateful and angry at their parents for a very dumb reason. It makes it far more easier to sympatheize with her and understand her character a little better when she expresses a genuine love for her parents. I also think it makes her character's point make more sense. If she hated her parents, why would she care? It's good character development.

I also like how you mentioned Chip. You should really bring him back!

But I think you should introduce a subplot, we all know what the secret is. But if you add something we don't know, like another mystery or subplot (As I said before) the audience would be able to relate to her already well potrayed confusion.
Blackgrrl92
2008-05-14
ch 1,
abuseI like the idea of Belle having a daughter and the fact that she wants more than this provincial life. Update soon!
Naomi Friesen
2008-04-30
ch 1, anon.
abusei love it keep writing or i ll stop reading
Yunagirlamy
2008-04-28
ch 1,
abuseThis story is interesting, and very original. I can't wait until the next chapter.

YGA
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