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| Isleen 2008-06-29 ch 2, | abuseI really like it so far! I really like how you've developed Alex. Most characters that rebel against their parents are ungrateful and angry at their parents for a very dumb reason. It makes it far more easier to sympatheize with her and understand her character a little better when she expresses a genuine love for her parents. I also think it makes her character's point make more sense. If she hated her parents, why would she care? It's good character development. I also like how you mentioned Chip. You should really bring him back! But I think you should introduce a subplot, we all know what the secret is. But if you add something we don't know, like another mystery or subplot (As I said before) the audience would be able to relate to her already well potrayed confusion. |
| Blackgrrl92 2008-05-14 ch 1, | abuseI like the idea of Belle having a daughter and the fact that she wants more than this provincial life. Update soon! |
| Naomi Friesen 2008-04-30 ch 1, anon. | abusei love it keep writing or i ll stop reading |
| Yunagirlamy 2008-04-28 ch 1, | abuseThis story is interesting, and very original. I can't wait until the next chapter. YGA |