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| Epifonie Dot 2008-07-06 ch 11, | abuseOkay, it's a very good story. There's a *lot* of detail, though chapters 6 and 7 were a little choppy-ish and kind of confused me. Your characters are hitting the Mary Sue mark, though the death of Jessi surprised me. That's a plus. I know that you still have a bunch more chapters to go (hopefully), but there needs to be some character development. Not only your own, but the others (i.e., Tancred, Lysander, Olivia, or Charlie). At least one or two of them. There's a little OOCness in the story, but I'll enjoy seeing what you come up with next. LYKE YEAH. |
| Jelly1029 2008-05-25 ch 7, | abuseThis is kind of really amazing...Except you forgot chapter five. It's still has its Greek-Gods worthy awesomeness though. Keep going! For the sake of exclamation points! |
| Jelly1029 2008-05-24 ch 5, | abuseOMIGODS AMAZING! I totally HEART this story! Keep it up, you crazy rockstar! |
| Eagleh-sama 2008-05-23 ch 1, | abuseI like this fic =] It's rather short, and I dislike the fact that it's TancxOC and SanderxOC ;-; But apart from that, it's great. |
| Jelly1029 2008-04-26 ch 4, | abuseOh my gods this is AWESOME! I got really excited when I saw that put up three chapters in a row. Ye! Keep going! Please! I love it SO MUCH! It deserves "w00t!"! |